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mimic life
Stripped down and simplified
To the raw and bleeding core
Tired, immoble
Like an over-fattened mule
And so I find myself stuck
Glued to the same old situation
Stagnated with bored indifference
Between my aimless wandering,
and my endless standing still,
You would think I'd know the way by now
Yet I remain here open-eyed
Without what it takes to see
Spinning like a window pane on a string
Trying to capture
the ghost of a reflection
Of life going on all around me.
To the raw and bleeding core
Tired, immoble
Like an over-fattened mule
And so I find myself stuck
Glued to the same old situation
Stagnated with bored indifference
Between my aimless wandering,
and my endless standing still,
You would think I'd know the way by now
Yet I remain here open-eyed
Without what it takes to see
Spinning like a window pane on a string
Trying to capture
the ghost of a reflection
Of life going on all around me.
Published 2nd Jan 2011
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8th Jan 2011 5:33am
I can really relate to this poem and since it does express how I feel myself a lot of times,I really like it.
20th Jan 2011 10:41pm
I'm feeling this one spiritually and mentally.Makes me ask the timeless questions.. What if and Have I.
1st Feb 2011 8:34pm
This has to be my favourite poem i have read since joining...I have read about 100 poems so far.
this captures the essence of being here, but not really existing.
Loved this:
Stagnated with bored indifference
Between my aimless wandering,
and my endless standing still,
and my favourite image was:
Spinning like a window pane on a string
A truly stunning piece!
regards,
Hooded
this captures the essence of being here, but not really existing.
Loved this:
Stagnated with bored indifference
Between my aimless wandering,
and my endless standing still,
and my favourite image was:
Spinning like a window pane on a string
A truly stunning piece!
regards,
Hooded
1st Feb 2011 8:49pm
Wow! Thank you! I am truly honored to recieve such a high compliment from an obviously talented man!
