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perfect tree
Dear tree
You held the tire swing, the one
All my neighbor friends
We swung like monkeys on acid.
Dear tree
Love be carved
Initials, I heart you
Yours, mine no its our
Hands carving I love you
You are mine
Bff
Dear tree
Beneath you a picnic
Perhaps a first kiss
First time parents dance with joy
The perfect tree you were.
You held the tire swing, the one
All my neighbor friends
We swung like monkeys on acid.
Dear tree
Love be carved
Initials, I heart you
Yours, mine no its our
Hands carving I love you
You are mine
Bff
Dear tree
Beneath you a picnic
Perhaps a first kiss
First time parents dance with joy
The perfect tree you were.
Published 10th Sep 2013
| Edited 17th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
10th Sep 2013 6:35am
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10th Sep 2013 6:01pm
You featured a perfect tree in a not so perfect world. Good for starters, but can be sliced and diced to be perfect.
Try posting it on Forums under Poetry Workshop and keep your fingers crossed somebody might take notice!
Try posting it on Forums under Poetry Workshop and keep your fingers crossed somebody might take notice!
10th Sep 2013 6:18pm
Thank you. I appreciate honesty. I agree my writes need working on, but for now I write with out edit for practice.
10th Sep 2013 10:55pm
It's OK to edit and re-edit...I advise you to keep it as a habit, but always keep your original! It's something worthwhile to look back and appreciate what you have accomplished as you progress in your learning curve. Pen on and keep your words flowing just like the River...
