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when
got just enough of the little lightnings lit
to wanna stack together a few nickels
get a semi reliable whip
admit to myself
that a few of my chops
could catch a few clams
but not with these words
these words are third party notaries
specifying that the author is not:
seeing distance shores
because his belly's full, because
the ganja goes through to next week
the tobacco goes two, three days
the rent is caught up
for the entire fucking month
is not swept up in mere mania
it's the little lightnings lining up
signing my name to paychecks
earned overtime
without my own hand in the way
it's the anchor being pulled
by the wind telling the author
when it's time to go
to wanna stack together a few nickels
get a semi reliable whip
admit to myself
that a few of my chops
could catch a few clams
but not with these words
these words are third party notaries
specifying that the author is not:
seeing distance shores
because his belly's full, because
the ganja goes through to next week
the tobacco goes two, three days
the rent is caught up
for the entire fucking month
is not swept up in mere mania
it's the little lightnings lining up
signing my name to paychecks
earned overtime
without my own hand in the way
it's the anchor being pulled
by the wind telling the author
when it's time to go
Published 9th Sep 2013
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9th Sep 2013 1:43am
i dig it bro.....
i think i think the 1st anchor is too much tho.
different terminology is all not the concept.
the repetition distracts too much from other lines.
i always love writes that touch on writing or the identity of one who does
so the first stanza is here i am but i'm only lettin a lil give a shit out.
keeps the audience spoon fed awaiting the next serving not here's a large with evrything go ahead and binge on fast food and nt grab the mess.....
i like cuzzin.......
good timing and progression i mean.....
idk i drink alot.
i think i think the 1st anchor is too much tho.
different terminology is all not the concept.
the repetition distracts too much from other lines.
i always love writes that touch on writing or the identity of one who does
so the first stanza is here i am but i'm only lettin a lil give a shit out.
keeps the audience spoon fed awaiting the next serving not here's a large with evrything go ahead and binge on fast food and nt grab the mess.....
i like cuzzin.......
good timing and progression i mean.....
idk i drink alot.
9th Sep 2013 10:43am
Drink up, "do it for Johnny " (outsiders reference)
See what ya mean w first anchor, tried to sort that out with another cliche, ha... Felt I repeated a few things too often here ( "it's" is used too often I think...ehh)
Thank ya jr... Thoughts always appreciated
See what ya mean w first anchor, tried to sort that out with another cliche, ha... Felt I repeated a few things too often here ( "it's" is used too often I think...ehh)
Thank ya jr... Thoughts always appreciated
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10th Sep 2013 8:15pm
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