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the lake
cradled in the waves
she submits
water surrounded by breeze
whispers submerged beneath the cool waves
splashing secrets
tickling her warm skin
desires burning beneath the sun
she dreams
endless time to explore the distance
she sees
no end to the flow in the water
overwhelmed in peace
she smiles
her pain is forgotten left long ago
she welcomes her new love
peace on a lake.
she submits
water surrounded by breeze
whispers submerged beneath the cool waves
splashing secrets
tickling her warm skin
desires burning beneath the sun
she dreams
endless time to explore the distance
she sees
no end to the flow in the water
overwhelmed in peace
she smiles
her pain is forgotten left long ago
she welcomes her new love
peace on a lake.
Published 6th Sep 2013
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Anonymous
9th Sep 2013 6:47pm
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9th Sep 2013 7:42pm
9th Sep 2013 7:43pm
I can feel the peace that "she" is experiencing. Great write and welcome to DUP (:
9th Sep 2013 7:58pm
Thank you for the welcome. I wrote this after a beautiful time in Lake Cumberland.
9th Sep 2013 8:26pm
And it came out beautifully. Why don't you try writing a poem about a tree?
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/5727/
Post it there. It's for a good cause (: and it would be very much appreciated
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/5727/
Post it there. It's for a good cause (: and it would be very much appreciated
Anonymous
11th Sep 2013 6:20pm
This poem feels like liquid Xanax.
Amazing!
Amazing!
11th Sep 2013 6:28pm
Awesome. Thank you Matt. I love any and everything outdoors but its something special out on water. Thanks for reading.
Anonymous
14th Sep 2013 7:27pm
This is s truly beautiful write, I look forward to reading more poetry by you, River!!!
15th Sep 2013 8:49pm
something tranquil about floating
on water, the breeze against the skin,
the mind at ease...
beautiful poem.
on water, the breeze against the skin,
the mind at ease...
beautiful poem.
18th Sep 2013 10:19pm
Well, I have a soft spot for poetry with the sea or water in general, but biased or not, I do believe it's still got a great feel to it.
Keep at it, poet.
Welcome to DU, btw.
:)
Keep at it, poet.
Welcome to DU, btw.
:)
19th Sep 2013 3:55am
Atakti, thank you much. Water makes for a great write. Thanks for the welcome. I feel right at home.
