Sterling (not so) Silver, (Thanks to Sterling for the little piece)

Love this Evan! I'm really loving the new you xoxo

I'm something new? I haven't even noticed ahaha... Thank you Gigi, glad you stopped by

Though it isn't kind or intimate, this poem could be labelled "erotic" rather than "miscellaneous". God knows that DU's erotic genre needs some subtlety and menace! S4 ("I'll take your kiss ...") is wonderfully vampiric, as though your narrator is an immortal leech who feeds on youth and draws young women to their doom. The poem as a whole isn't hateful so much as just evil. There's no wrath, just quiet, considered mean-spiritedness. Come to think of it, it could also be labelled "dark". One thing: does L2 of S2 ("perhaps a coat ...") need its comma? Thank you for the read.

Jack, my good man. I wrote this as a battle poem in a competition thread to a lovely young woman, as you can see I had the restraint to remain a civil gentlemen. Hah!

Yes I was liking this. I did see it in the thread. It does have the self control that shows mastery. (You could also see in the thread those individuals with no control airing-out their loud and empty words). I have to agree with Gigi, I like the new you much better. You seem to have a level-headed ability to take criticism and mold it toward self-betterment. You have come far and that trait will take you farther, in more areas than just writing as well.
 
Minor suggestions, stanza 2 line 2 is a more old-fashioned English that the rest. It needs more than just the comma to my ear. "Perhaps your tongue could use a coat" is more consistent with the other lines, which are all in contemporary English. Last line the "to" should be an "of" for grammar. But for spitting back a comment on the spur of the moment in a poetry "battle" it has a solid foundation that lets it rise above the context.

Steve man, appreciate the thoughtful words, I've been going through a lot recently and that has come into all areas of my life, I'm on the tip of leaving behind my entire life and going to find a new one, I've really been reflecting hard on everything that's gone down, who and what I'm leaving behind, what I'm about go do and who I'm about to finish becoming, and my writing reflects that more deeply than my rambling ever really could.

Thanks again Braggman, I think you'll be impressed with my writing even more come this next year. There's much for me to do.

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I'll give erotica more of a go then