The Matador

Your ability to paint great pictures with words is commendable. In this short prose you were able to entertain, lure and frighten. You even made me envy whoever is your lover.

You frightened me when I see you all dressed up "in lace scarlet undergarment," a matador posing at the arena and I, the silly bull coming after the scarlet colour and you taunt me again and again till you finally get it done with.

Your works reveal things about you and it makes me love not just the work...

aww that's sweet... thanks Divine! :)

This is so vivid. The air it creates is so thick with danger and mystery but it wraps round you and draws you in...like the sirens from the Greek myths.

wow! thanks Merda, i appreciate it :)

Death, a hint of prayer, some sex to spice, and a wished kiss...your cooking is powerful...

shuckss...stop dissecting my poem like that, you're revealing my secret ingredients!(haha, just joking!):-)
Glad that you liked it... Muchas gracias mi Hem!

I really like the ending.  It's a shocker.  Nice to see a poem that has a bit of a twist. :)

Im really glad that you noticed the twist...thankss soo much! :)

...& look at this again, because it's a fine write deserving of tweaks to make it great. And I don't mean the typo in L6 or the unnecessary translation provided. I think the last 4 lines may not be required - they could even be the start of another poem entirely!
Here's a kwik alternative, hope it generates a few ideas for you.
 
Someday,  
you won't have to fight bulls
or dance with death  
in that olde world Spanish arena
under the judgement
of big, dark, piercing eyes
those beautiful, superstitious people
and the harsh sun of Seville
Instead, you'll be with me
consuming Spain
or around the world if you please
We'll find where the sun shines sweetest
build our love nest there  
so every night we can feed
on moonlight, stars and dreams
I'll be your lady matador  
in scarlet lace underwear
you'll be my bull-lover  
riding to forever
as hard as we can
para el resto de nuestras vidas...  
 
Please feel free to smack, or ignore (s'all equal to me)  
 
Best ~ Abra
 
  

wow! i think i like your version better... but this poem i kinda wrote this from a dream and i was totally dream writing when i wrote it, hence the lack of edge, just pure haziness... hmmm, I would totally consider your suggestions for they are really good... but lemme sleep on it first, and see if my subconscious would agree! thank you though Abra! :)

this is a fine, evocative poem - thats paints different pictures and creates differing moods as it progresses.

really enjoyed it..

I can chime with you in your last comment about keeping it as it is.

Que rico

S

Gracias por lo mucho que aprecio el comentario agradable!