A Night in November

A well composed poem, that avoids all the usual "lost love" cliches.

Just one criticism... the second to last line doesn't read right, is there a typo or is my brain scrambled?

The last lines have been set up to be profound, to make an impact, yet i feel liked it got lost in error somehow???

Thanks for the feedback. Is my punctuation all wrong perhaps? It should read that I look back sometimes to check if she's looking too, but then remember that she never seen (our love) in the first place, but I never knew that when we were together.

"I look back sometimes to check if you're looking too, but you never seen our love to begin with - and that, I never knew."

Does that make sense? I need help with my grammar lol

the grammatical error is in 'you never *saw*'. it's either 'you have never seen' or 'you never saw'. just the tense...hope that helps.
but i agree, nicely done otherwise. [:

I feel that to remember implies you knew, so therefore you should "realize" that she had never seen what YOU felt, what YOU knew.

I look back sometimes to check if you are looking too.
Then I realize...
You had never seen that which
I never knew.

In retrospect, I LOVE this poem.  i just had to re-sync it in my head to get its profound impact.

Hopefully that reads a bit better now. Thanks for your help folks :)