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love your concept here, absolutely almost wanted to reading list it...
i rarely ever have anything negative to say about anyone's work, not really my thing, but if i may offer some critique, please know i am not an educated writer so anything i say can pretty much be written off, and if you don't want to change it, because it has a deeper meaning maybe i am just not getting, then please don't =].

but in my personal opinion i think you should try to use some more colorful words with this, spice it up a little, like i said, the idea here is great, and it has a lot of potential, just needs something a little more i am feeling like.

but whatever you do, don't change this part
" I don't know what happened
it was so quick
was it an accident
or maybe a heart attack
was I shot
or did a bomb go off. "

that flows really well i think, and i loved it <3.

Thank you for your words,always can use a little help.Wrote this after the Boston bombing,will consider your advice...and please keep on giving it...peace 2 u.

I really enjoyed this.
fantastic piece of writing, but I also agree with laceyspacey in that in a way it kind of seems unfinished to me.. like she said, since the same applies to me, I'm not an educated writer, so of course, you can take anything I say with a grain of salt.

Thank you for caring enough to tell what you think.I will give this one some more time...peace and love to you.

Dead or alive ;)...thank you for stopping by.

I feel this one. Good write.

Thank you good sir...peace.