Commenting Preference:
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15th Jul 2013 10:19pm
I would have left the "A" off of the last 4 lines.
To me it would give the "rush", "flash", etc. more of a suddenness and potency just like the act this poem is portraying.
And did you mean "loss" instead of "lose" in the last line?
Nice job Dragon Lilith! - myambermutt
To me it would give the "rush", "flash", etc. more of a suddenness and potency just like the act this poem is portraying.
And did you mean "loss" instead of "lose" in the last line?
Nice job Dragon Lilith! - myambermutt
16th Jul 2013 3:12am
16th Jul 2013 8:19am
