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Fuck Me Where I Stand
Begging
for him
to fuck
me
Fuck
me where
I
stand
Wanting
his hard
touch
in me
Giving
him the
sultry
look
Placing
his hands
on my
hips
Sucking
on my
bottom
lip
Guiding
his dick
inside
me
Begging
him to
fuck me
harder
Pounding
my pussy
deep and
good
for him
to fuck
me
Fuck
me where
I
stand
Wanting
his hard
touch
in me
Giving
him the
sultry
look
Placing
his hands
on my
hips
Sucking
on my
bottom
lip
Guiding
his dick
inside
me
Begging
him to
fuck me
harder
Pounding
my pussy
deep and
good
Published 4th Jul 2013
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4th Jul 2013 2:39am
Ugh!!hhmmphhhaaarrrggghhh!!! Aaawww aaaawww omfg!! Omgfg!!! Aaahhhhhhh!!! SPLATT!!!! lol
whew, got a ciggy? lol
whew, got a ciggy? lol
4th Jul 2013 2:45am
I don't smoke anymore...but if I had a damn good enough reason to light one up I just might!!
4th Jul 2013 2:56am
I don't know if you smoke after sex, but you're on fire right now....hot write...
4th Jul 2013 4:29am
Anonymous
4th Jul 2013 2:57am
Fast furious tempo-write tl..
nice write
strider
nice write
strider
4th Jul 2013 4:30am
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4th Jul 2013 3:29am
While I found the flow to be pretty good, I could've used a little more imagery, personally. I'm one of those writers/readers who enjoys a good poem that shows you something, instead of tells you something. Especially of this variety. But I still believe that you have something very well written here.
I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the near future, but maybe one of those pieces will be more descriptive. This form is great, but it's always good to have unlimited uses of poetry, no matter the situation. :D
I look forward to reading more of your stuff in the near future, but maybe one of those pieces will be more descriptive. This form is great, but it's always good to have unlimited uses of poetry, no matter the situation. :D
4th Jul 2013 4:36am
wickedbillie,
Thank you for your honest feedback, I will keep it in mind for my next write! ;) and thank you for reading!
Thank you for your honest feedback, I will keep it in mind for my next write! ;) and thank you for reading!
Anonymous
4th Jul 2013 5:06am
The tempo was off, the syntax sucks...but not bad not bad ;)
I'm pulling your finely turned leg, of course! :P
I'm pulling your finely turned leg, of course! :P
4th Jul 2013 5:10am
Anonymous
4th Jul 2013 6:49pm
Bring it on poetry girl!
5th Jul 2013 00:17am
Drive it home TOMMI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! wheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeewww!! hahah
5th Jul 2013 1:15am
