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the venus henge
see the silky pink
I have caught your eye
(as you have caught mine)
what's that you smell?
pheromones are strangely sweet aren't they?
(you can almost taste)
walk near me
take my hand
(I am a trap and we will break through time)
forced to you knees
in your mouth whether you choose to or not
(it's all changed when you break into tears)
the sound of your pleas and sobbing
raise some questions
(not enough to halt efforts)
be on the clouds with me and the gods
I'll paint my skin blue and carry your body
(you're my favorite crime)
I will strip love down to blood
I have caught your eye
(as you have caught mine)
what's that you smell?
pheromones are strangely sweet aren't they?
(you can almost taste)
walk near me
take my hand
(I am a trap and we will break through time)
forced to you knees
in your mouth whether you choose to or not
(it's all changed when you break into tears)
the sound of your pleas and sobbing
raise some questions
(not enough to halt efforts)
be on the clouds with me and the gods
I'll paint my skin blue and carry your body
(you're my favorite crime)
I will strip love down to blood
Published 26th Nov 2010
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26th Nov 2010 9:25pm
I love that line 'i'll pain my skin blue'....you're the sky, and you hold up...everything.
27th Nov 2010 6:28pm
blue is the skin color of some of the hindu gods like shiva so being painted was trying to mimic the gods :) I am the light skinned Ggod and i will do my best to hold up everything on my shoulders until i cant take it all anymore than drop the sky on everything and sleep.. goodnight sweet princess
26th Nov 2010 11:00pm
i agree with merda! it's my favourite line as well!
so romantically sinister!
so romantically sinister!
27th Nov 2010 6:30pm
blue is the skin color of some of the hindu gods like shiva so being painted was trying to mimic the gods :) i love romance when its sinister :D
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27th Nov 2010 6:30pm
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28th Nov 2010 2:45am
My favourite line is: "(I am a trap and we will break through time)". This mix of brutality and tenderness is what I love about your more gruesome pieces. I'm sure some people reading this won't know if they should be horrified or hard. :P
28th Nov 2010 2:53am
yeah the word henge means trap which is why i called it venus henge.. like stone henge.. maybe ill write a poem named stone trap :) more plays on words.. yay! moving through time is too much to explain right now so i wont :P tenderness and brutality are my forte esp together.. and i think you can be hard and horrified at the same time.. but i cant speak from experience
28th Nov 2010 5:35am
28th Nov 2010 6:11am
i like that line too but im going to be taking it out of this poem and making a different poem with it.. i think this story ends better with "youre my favorite crime" glad you dig it
29th Nov 2010 4:20pm
do you keep coming up with these amazing lines? I swear I haven't read anything that you have wrote that I didn't love...I can't wait to see what that twisted(beautiful) mind comes up with next.
29th Nov 2010 5:38pm
its my mission, my goal, and my forte to come up with last lines that really pull everything together and have a kick to em.. idk how i come up with lines like that i just know they have to effect the reader in a powerful way and i've had a ton of practice (as well plenty of shit years of writing) they just come out.. i have my heart in everything i write.. glad you dig my stuff.. more twisted shit on the way.. ;)
30th Nov 2010 8:09am
love the lines "I will strip love down to blood" and "you are my favourite crime", simply fantastic
30th Nov 2010 1:26pm
:) i like the love/blood line as well but i may take it out of this poem
