transference

There's such a sudden contrast between the first two lines and the rest of the poem...I like that, it suits that line 'I'll break into your world'.

yeah like i told you I was going to go in a softer direction like the second like the second stanza might have started "i'll come into your world and fill you heart," but i wasnt feeling it so i did my favorite thing and made a nice contrast that you werent expecting.. i think it worked out well <3

I just want to tell you how fucking incredible all of your poetry is; you are very talented and I hope you continue writing and sharing it on this site. I think you are hands-down the best poet I have read on DU; the words you write shake me to the depths of my soul.....

thank you so much for the generous compliment.. I'm glad my writing has such a profound effect on you and that you think my work is the best here.. I try.. and I will definitely keep writing and submitting.. it's people like you who make my "job" here rewarding.. so ty.. cheers!

I love the way you wrote this, it really flows.
I think it has left me speechless!
Good job, hon!

its all an illusion go back to sleep its just zeros and ones go back to sleep you're not even reading this go back to sleep its slight of hand in a coma nothing special even God can do it go back to sleep ;)

You're the darkest romantic poet I've ever come across, Nathan. Your subtle pieces like this are your best, in my opinion.

you know i prefer short and sublte.. gotta leave something to the imagination cant all their cunts hanging out all of the time :D