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The flow of things
I asked for success
disappointment came first
failure pursued close
so did the burdens of all my hopes
I've lost all sense in the things around me
mixing my hatred with apathy to slumber in pity
no bar girl's titty will construe this animosity
thrashing mad within the synapses of my mind
if in finding the light I will be saved,
then I will break every fucking bulb that glows
such a shame - wallowing for name
pain is the ultimate game
lets see who can take the most punishment
they place bets and take shots
they is the flow of things
and they are assholes.
disappointment came first
failure pursued close
so did the burdens of all my hopes
I've lost all sense in the things around me
mixing my hatred with apathy to slumber in pity
no bar girl's titty will construe this animosity
thrashing mad within the synapses of my mind
if in finding the light I will be saved,
then I will break every fucking bulb that glows
such a shame - wallowing for name
pain is the ultimate game
lets see who can take the most punishment
they place bets and take shots
they is the flow of things
and they are assholes.
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Re: The flow of things
11th Jun 2013 7:08pm
Wondering if I'm an asshole?! o_O HA! Sometimes!
Nicely done my friend! Xo
I love it when you're angry, 13!
#TurnsMeOn
Nicely done my friend! Xo
I love it when you're angry, 13!
#TurnsMeOn
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re: Re: The flow of things
11th Jun 2013 8:03pm
this is a bit more deeper than that, rain :P
and no, you dont appear to be one to me ;)
many thanks! :D
#score!!! haha
and no, you dont appear to be one to me ;)
many thanks! :D
#score!!! haha
re: re: Re: The flow of things
12th Jun 2013 12:35pm
aww....didn't mean to come across as though I'm brushing off the depth of your ink and the anger it speaks. Xo
You know I know that you know that I'm just being an 'asshole' eh?! *scratching head* :)
You know I know that you know that I'm just being an 'asshole' eh?! *scratching head* :)
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14th Jun 2013 1:41pm
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Re: The flow of things
11th Jun 2013 9:31pm
Yeah it sucks when what your trying for falls apart, and people get enjoyment from this. Assholes yes!
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14th Jun 2013 1:42pm
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12th Jun 2013 00:53am
Re: The flow of things
12th Jun 2013 6:23am
"I asked for success
disappointment came first
failure pursued close
so did the burdens of all my hopes."
I could relate.. Probably going through the same ! Glad I read this poem..:)
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re: Re: The flow of things
14th Jun 2013 1:43pm
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Re: The flow of things
14th Jun 2013 9:04pm
"If in finding the light I will be saved,
then I will break ever fucking bulb that glows."
Bravo. It really sums up my interpretation of this piece and I like it.
then I will break ever fucking bulb that glows."
Bravo. It really sums up my interpretation of this piece and I like it.
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Re: The flow of things
18th Jun 2013 3:43pm
Your first stanza is very telling...it builds up like a slowly warming pot...only to boil..on the other side..what doesn't kill ya makes ya stronger...hercules..hercules!!
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Re: The flow of things
Anonymous
18th Jun 2013 6:29pm
Anger as a tool for rising - I like it. Schadenfreude is an ugly thing.
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19th Jun 2013 2:10pm
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Anonymous
19th Jun 2013 6:45pm
True. Always satisfying when it's you, lol.
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