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The Wind
Sometimes the wind is the one who guides you.
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The wind knows what it is doing.
Listen to it. It can be your greatest ally, and best
advice giver.
It soothes you when you need it and comforts you.
Don't fight it and let the wind guide you.
W h e t h e r i t b e a b r o k e n p a t h
OrASmallWalkway OR
D
o
w
n
A
R
a
b
b
i
t
H
o
l
e
The wind knows what it is doing.
Listen to it. It can be your greatest ally, and best
advice giver.
It soothes you when you need it and comforts you.
Don't fight it and let the wind guide you.
Published 11th Jun 2013
| Edited 28th Jun 2013
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11th Jun 2013 4:53pm
i love the style you typed this in! it definitely got my attention out of all the other poems
11th Jun 2013 9:44pm
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26th Jun 2013 2:08am
This is my favorite piece of yours so far. The shape/style is not just unique, it actually adds to the visualization.
In terms of feedback, as you have asked, is the latter half of this writing, after the rabbit hole line, it does not match the shape of the rest of the poem. The words are powerful and fit in. My opinion is you should break it up into more lines. Thanks for sharing it
In terms of feedback, as you have asked, is the latter half of this writing, after the rabbit hole line, it does not match the shape of the rest of the poem. The words are powerful and fit in. My opinion is you should break it up into more lines. Thanks for sharing it
28th Jun 2013 2:35am
