Please

I liked it

Thanks.This poem is very important to me.

Everything goes together very well, and it shows promise, as a preview, and standing on its own.  I can see a volume of work, composed around this theme of leaving.

Thanks.

nice poem and i certainly agree with patrick on the promise theme of the poem. very good work.
a good read.
keep writing  :) x

Thanks! it means a lot to me that people like this poem.I'm working on poems that are like 'open letters' to people i might have wished to tell something in the past, but didn't. This is just a preview of how personal things will get. Thanks 4 reading :)

I would really love to see somemore of your poetry, its doing what many won't do,being simple but complex at the same time

Sounds like a blues song. Smoky and painful. Good write Jacksylverwind!