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Could only hope.
The first time i saw you,
You stole my heart,
That moment you walked straight past me and smile.
Since that day,
You have been stuck in my head.
I've been lost looking for someone like you,
And i've found you.
You don't know i exsist.
You see me alot tho,
At work and at shops.
Maybe i need to stop being so afraid,
And take a risk,
Tell you who i am.
Let you know i exsist.
Hang out and maybe my dream will come true.
The only person to steal my heart just by walking past me and smiling.
That moment i looked at you my heart stopped,
I got a weird feeling inside my belly,
I must have you.
You must be mine.
If we were to ever get together,
I would do so much for you,
Make you feel so perfect.
I would be there for you no matter what.
I remember that day i seen you,
It was the 26th of October 2010.
Not that long ago.
But since then i haven't been able to forget about you,
Or let go.
You must be an angel,
Sent from up above.
Because you so easly stole my heart.
You're all i can think about.
And i hope and wait each day that i see you again.
You brighten my dim light.
You give me goosebumps.
No one has ever done what you did to me in just a split second.
This could be love at first sight for me.
You stole my heart,
That moment you walked straight past me and smile.
Since that day,
You have been stuck in my head.
I've been lost looking for someone like you,
And i've found you.
You don't know i exsist.
You see me alot tho,
At work and at shops.
Maybe i need to stop being so afraid,
And take a risk,
Tell you who i am.
Let you know i exsist.
Hang out and maybe my dream will come true.
The only person to steal my heart just by walking past me and smiling.
That moment i looked at you my heart stopped,
I got a weird feeling inside my belly,
I must have you.
You must be mine.
If we were to ever get together,
I would do so much for you,
Make you feel so perfect.
I would be there for you no matter what.
I remember that day i seen you,
It was the 26th of October 2010.
Not that long ago.
But since then i haven't been able to forget about you,
Or let go.
You must be an angel,
Sent from up above.
Because you so easly stole my heart.
You're all i can think about.
And i hope and wait each day that i see you again.
You brighten my dim light.
You give me goosebumps.
No one has ever done what you did to me in just a split second.
This could be love at first sight for me.
Published 3rd Nov 2010
| Edited 5th Nov 2010
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3rd Nov 2010 9:31pm
Hi Teesha
You have done a good job here, particularly for such a young writer. Be carefull about a couple of things, because they impact the readers experience. The first is spelling, and that might just be me being an old bastard. The second is the english..."the first time I seen you", is pretty poor english. You can totally tell me to piss off on that, because you may be deliberatly using the language of your peer group which is cool, just as long as you know you are doing it.
Don't forget to read lots of poems :-)
You have done a good job here, particularly for such a young writer. Be carefull about a couple of things, because they impact the readers experience. The first is spelling, and that might just be me being an old bastard. The second is the english..."the first time I seen you", is pretty poor english. You can totally tell me to piss off on that, because you may be deliberatly using the language of your peer group which is cool, just as long as you know you are doing it.
Don't forget to read lots of poems :-)
17th Jan 2011 10:37am
