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W for Weeds, W for Wings
My love isn't going to save you
I will never make that claim
Eros doesn't move me that boast
I don't expect orbital acuteness
to follow my every breath and step
the ground I walk to garnished with petals
The red that symbolizes the ardor of one moment
isn't diminished after sweet orgasm
but rather fond for even more
Yes flowers will not stay fragrant
wither they will and die
but in your embrace is the sustenance for renewal
as the sun powers the world's life
We shall not cling to each other
as if weeds hoarding soil and air
but take to flight with certainty
that the landing defines serenity
So no my love won't save you
not codependent on the path
but that doesn't mean you must fly solo...
I will never make that claim
Eros doesn't move me that boast
I don't expect orbital acuteness
to follow my every breath and step
the ground I walk to garnished with petals
The red that symbolizes the ardor of one moment
isn't diminished after sweet orgasm
but rather fond for even more
Yes flowers will not stay fragrant
wither they will and die
but in your embrace is the sustenance for renewal
as the sun powers the world's life
We shall not cling to each other
as if weeds hoarding soil and air
but take to flight with certainty
that the landing defines serenity
So no my love won't save you
not codependent on the path
but that doesn't mean you must fly solo...
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Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
Anonymous
23rd May 2013 7:52pm
I love the honest, balanced intelligence here and in every way it seems perfect..great flow, as always.
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 8:56pm
Thank you Miki. For various reasons, I had low expectations for how this write would turn out. I pleased that you found it worth reading.
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 8:25pm
I think I'm in love..............with this poem of course!:)
W for Words; that were lovely and delivered by a thief who stole my breath away!
Beautiful! Xo
W for Words; that were lovely and delivered by a thief who stole my breath away!
Beautiful! Xo
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 8:58pm
Thanks- the first part had been waiting for someone to add to it, via a collaboration. Never happened so I decided to polish it off myself!
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 9:11pm
I love the topic you chose here -- co-dependency....
It struck a nerve with me, because I have been in an unhealthy co-dependent relationship for a long time and would not want to repeat the pattern in my next relationship.....
Great write.... <3
It struck a nerve with me, because I have been in an unhealthy co-dependent relationship for a long time and would not want to repeat the pattern in my next relationship.....
Great write.... <3
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 11:41pm
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
Anonymous
23rd May 2013 9:26pm
Well done jazz manor...strider!
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
23rd May 2013 11:42pm
Thanks---it was nice to complete something that had been unfinished for months!
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
Anonymous
23rd May 2013 9:35pm
I don't want your love to save me
I want your love to stand by me
While I save myself.
Love this poem, cher.
I want your love to stand by me
While I save myself.
Love this poem, cher.
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
24th May 2013 2:47am
I think the trick may be that last part, saving yourself!
Thanks for the read.
Thanks for the read.
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
24th May 2013 10:41am
The honesty and reassurance does the trick for me;though your love won't save her,she'll never be alone. Good interplay here Jazz. Nice write
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
24th May 2013 11:42am
Thanks Dusty; until your comment I was believing the write was all fiction but 8 years ago I was seeing an exotic dancer...
Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
26th May 2013 4:35pm
Fav line- No my love won't save you.
Love that Jazz!!
Great write Bro.
Sir Lancelott
Love that Jazz!!
Great write Bro.
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: W for Weeds, W for Wings
26th May 2013 6:44pm
Thanks; I was hearing a Sade song in the back on my mind but quoting it didn't seem to work.