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The Fall
Falling, falling
Neither in love
Nor unto some pit
Falling into a mighty brightness
Deeper than the heart of a woman
And uncertainty
Like the number of the stars.
Falling from the bottom
Of an unfamiliar history
Up, up to the top
Of a future
Where only one thing is sure:
Eternity
In a deep bright uncertainty.
Neither in love
Nor unto some pit
Falling into a mighty brightness
Deeper than the heart of a woman
And uncertainty
Like the number of the stars.
Falling from the bottom
Of an unfamiliar history
Up, up to the top
Of a future
Where only one thing is sure:
Eternity
In a deep bright uncertainty.
Published 25th Oct 2010
| Edited 26th Oct 2010
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26th Oct 2010 1:22am
i find it useless to repeat the word falling for three times. i understand you want to emphasise is but i don't think is necessary. anyway the poem is pretty good especially in the last 2 lines
26th Oct 2010 8:34am
Thank you Opheliac. Your observation/correction is noted. Something will be done about it. Thank you.
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2012 9:13pm
I agree with Opheliac. The last two lines are lovely.
I enjoyed this. Short and meaningful.
I enjoyed this. Short and meaningful.
14th Nov 2012 3:24am
23rd Nov 2012 4:26pm
