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Blow
I want to blow you...
I want to blow you away
No room for another stray
You make me feel a certain way
Pondering how fast you would decay
Something washes over me when it is here you stay
I hate the kind of person you portray
You trigger the memories of that day
The day that I had no say
You are just another piece of shit looking for prey
Published 4th May 2013
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The author encourages honest critique.
8th May 2013 2:25am
I really like your poems. but since you diiid say you encourage honest critique, I really believe replacing "piece of shit" with something more... hurtful... would be more effective. though at the same time i like the lack of thought it portrays (not saying you didn't give it thought by any means whatsoever) because it's almost like "why bother even thinking of a more complicated insult for such a bastard?" actually forget this whole comment lol
8th May 2013 6:24am
re: Re: Blow
8th May 2013 5:50pm
