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FreeWrite 4/22.13
I'm not the
Only one
Who has lost
When I won
I can't try
To go run
When I can't
See the sun
I've fallen
Into pits
Like Hell lost
And frozen
I'm waking
Up from the
Slumber that
Broke me a-
Part into
Millions of
Pieces and
I can't run
Only one
Who has lost
When I won
I can't try
To go run
When I can't
See the sun
I've fallen
Into pits
Like Hell lost
And frozen
I'm waking
Up from the
Slumber that
Broke me a-
Part into
Millions of
Pieces and
I can't run
Published 22nd Apr 2013
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22nd Apr 2013 7:58pm
Yeah, not the best I know. I'm just trying to get back into the swing of things. Every line should have 3 Syllables.
22nd Apr 2013 8:37pm
I agree, not the best. But still better than mine.
I loved the lines:
"When I can't
See the sun
I've fallen
Into pits
Like Hell lost
And frozen"
I loved the lines:
"When I can't
See the sun
I've fallen
Into pits
Like Hell lost
And frozen"
22nd Apr 2013 9:15pm
7th May 2013 1:28am
Stream of consciousness is powerful. The first line hits hardest...
I'm not the
Only one
Who has lost
When I won
Freewriting or freestyling, spitting fire, improvising, is suuuuch an exercise in honesty. Don't doubt your work Levi, this shit is tight! More freewrites would be awesome because they pack the most punch without all the extraneous words to prettify things and slow shit down.
I'm not the
Only one
Who has lost
When I won
Freewriting or freestyling, spitting fire, improvising, is suuuuch an exercise in honesty. Don't doubt your work Levi, this shit is tight! More freewrites would be awesome because they pack the most punch without all the extraneous words to prettify things and slow shit down.
7th May 2013 3:25am
