Poetry competition CLOSED 18th October 2013 8:53pm
WINNER
anna_grin (ANNAN)
anna_grin (ANNAN)
RUNNER-UP:
LunaObscura
The Exquisite Corpse -Surrealistic Poetry Challenge
Anonymous
summultima said:[quote-235362-Mourganna]
Were it not for the fire
I`d die here in silence
Behind battered bolted doors
Vast void, vultures tearing
At the bleeding amputated heart
Quench my thirst for your blackened lips
Nocturnal nausea ignites the night
loved this entry, LIZQ! totally dark n into the constraint given v.well:|
THANK you, Uma...
My pleasure to join your comp
Were it not for the fire
I`d die here in silence
Behind battered bolted doors
Vast void, vultures tearing
At the bleeding amputated heart
Quench my thirst for your blackened lips
Nocturnal nausea ignites the night
loved this entry, LIZQ! totally dark n into the constraint given v.well:|
THANK you, Uma...
My pleasure to join your comp
I float unconsciously at the taste.
"I've got a fever," I say and ask the counter for xylokain
You there... decrease the Air Condition, my mind's being chilled.
Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?
Don't slam slurpees... That's fucking insane!!
Hope I got it right... I finally really understood what I was suppose to do
"I've got a fever," I say and ask the counter for xylokain
You there... decrease the Air Condition, my mind's being chilled.
Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?
Don't slam slurpees... That's fucking insane!!
Hope I got it right... I finally really understood what I was suppose to do
PsychicApocalypse said:I float unconsciously at the taste.
"I've got a fever," I say and ask the counter for xylokain
You there... decrease the Air Condition, my mind's being chilled.
Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?
Don't slam slurpees... That's fucking insane!!
Hope I got it right... I finally really understood what I was suppose to do
Hi DarkerHalf, thank u for the entry;|
You got the essence correct but there is a slight thing in format, that fourth liner of johnrot you should have exactly started with.
But , I would consider your entry v.much & you could have another try too, since two posts are allowed per poet ( not in immediate succession to your post, wait for another one to post)
I would take your fourth liner for the next entry to continue
"Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?"
"I've got a fever," I say and ask the counter for xylokain
You there... decrease the Air Condition, my mind's being chilled.
Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?
Don't slam slurpees... That's fucking insane!!
Hope I got it right... I finally really understood what I was suppose to do
Hi DarkerHalf, thank u for the entry;|
You got the essence correct but there is a slight thing in format, that fourth liner of johnrot you should have exactly started with.
But , I would consider your entry v.much & you could have another try too, since two posts are allowed per poet ( not in immediate succession to your post, wait for another one to post)
I would take your fourth liner for the next entry to continue
"Am I wrong to believe the cold as attack my brain?"
Wow, almost nobody were in compliance of those parameters asked for;|
All entries though were mind-boggling in their dark surrealism & constraint given, I esp. liked Ms Grin's stunning entry, Mourganna's bloody take & LunsObscura's creative entry!
A special mention to Rakhi, Vortexman & Strider, wonderful attempts!
Probably, would try to have a simplified surrealistic version next tym:|
tc all & thank u being here
All entries though were mind-boggling in their dark surrealism & constraint given, I esp. liked Ms Grin's stunning entry, Mourganna's bloody take & LunsObscura's creative entry!
A special mention to Rakhi, Vortexman & Strider, wonderful attempts!
Probably, would try to have a simplified surrealistic version next tym:|
tc all & thank u being here
Anonymous
Thank you, Uma, for choosing my poem as runner up!!!
Haha, I am now "Bloody Mourganna" lol
congrats to anna!
Haha, I am now "Bloody Mourganna" lol
congrats to anna!
