Poetry competition CLOSED 8th August 2013 1:47pm
WINNER
Gg78
Gg78
RUNNERS-UP:
Carpe_Noctem
and IzziSkyy
don't not do it and say you did...
Poetry Contest Description
ever been so tired you become a bit delusional?
here's what i want you to do, write a poem after 24 hours no sleep.
i don't mean that in any way shape or form metaphorically, i mean literally stay up for 24 hours and write a poem on the 24th hour,
if this is a typical thing for you, then it should be easy =]
-two entries per person
-obviously must be new
-i'm giving you two weeks because i know its hard to work that into one's schedule sometimes
-title it
-anything goes really, topic, style, whatever, as long as you were up for 24 hours or longer when you wrote it
-ask if you have any questions =]
and i have no way of knowing if you really did or didn't do it, so just do it =p..
i don't mean that in any way shape or form metaphorically, i mean literally stay up for 24 hours and write a poem on the 24th hour,
if this is a typical thing for you, then it should be easy =]
-two entries per person
-obviously must be new
-i'm giving you two weeks because i know its hard to work that into one's schedule sometimes
-title it
-anything goes really, topic, style, whatever, as long as you were up for 24 hours or longer when you wrote it
-ask if you have any questions =]
and i have no way of knowing if you really did or didn't do it, so just do it =p..
I've got some old ones written after a 23 day bout with insomnia when I was 31--would that work? I can't do a sleep-free extended period for current health reasons as well as the nature of my job--I could end up killing someone if I can't focus, but if my old stuff is ok, I'll post one of those.
i was kinda hoping for new ones, but if you got a really good one, or like lav said can't do it for health reasons, or time restrictions, then yeah go ahead and use an old one, it's no problem, =]
i'll mend my rules so you can add two if you'd like, so if you're able you can use and old and a new...
i'll mend my rules so you can add two if you'd like, so if you're able you can use and old and a new...
~I'm claiming medical restrictions on this. I'm type 1 bipolar, and sleep deprivation can trigger a manic episode. This piece was written during my most recent manic episode, after having been up for about 56 hours. For those who don't know, an arrhythmia is an irregular heart beat; more specifically, a bradycardia being too slow, and a tachycardia being too fast.~
Arrhythmia
Oh god I can’t breathe,
I tear at my throat to open it up;
I’ll take any toxic air I can
just to fill my deflated lungs.
The poison feels so damn good
when you’re used to nothing else…
how I’d love to tear apart my veins
and show you what’s inside.
Would you hold my beating heart
in the palm of your hand and feel me
with all the love in my heart for you.
Feel the bradycardia as the life
drains out of me and I slow down…
thoughts weighing down and everything is…
sluggish…
Then the tachycardia takes stride,
galloping through my fucking life,
bringing along with it pain in
my caved in and battered chest.
Anxiety’s little brother, tachycardia.
Wash your hands of me,
for god knows what bacteria
my faulty heart holds.
God knows how sick you could get.
My most sincere apologies.
Arrhythmia
Oh god I can’t breathe,
I tear at my throat to open it up;
I’ll take any toxic air I can
just to fill my deflated lungs.
The poison feels so damn good
when you’re used to nothing else…
how I’d love to tear apart my veins
and show you what’s inside.
Would you hold my beating heart
in the palm of your hand and feel me
with all the love in my heart for you.
Feel the bradycardia as the life
drains out of me and I slow down…
thoughts weighing down and everything is…
sluggish…
Then the tachycardia takes stride,
galloping through my fucking life,
bringing along with it pain in
my caved in and battered chest.
Anxiety’s little brother, tachycardia.
Wash your hands of me,
for god knows what bacteria
my faulty heart holds.
God knows how sick you could get.
My most sincere apologies.
I stayed.
I stayed awake,
I stayed in bed.
The sun didn't wake,
But it did in my head.
I got lost, on my way,
I tripped and stumbled.
I got dreary, but was okay.
Down the stairs I tumbled.
To the computer. the room,
Oh, how it was spinning.
I sat in my gloom.
But, I think I was grinning.
I was so very tired.
I got lost on the way to the bathroom.
I think my brain got rewired.
The shadows loom.
My computer is bright,
Against the dark.
I think it should be alright,
Till, I was eaten by a shark.
Gobbled whole.
I made no sound.
I waited in the troll,
Until I could look around.
But there was no light,
Not until I met a unicorn.
Who taught me the right,
And it told me to be warn.
I think I just joined a church,
Oops, but I got out okay.
I began to search,
And I met a turtle, I begged him to stay.
He sat by my side,
And I gave him a cookie.
He became my guide,
But he was a rookie.
We got lost in a house,
That I didn't recognize.
I met a mouse,
He led me out alive.
I got in bed, and I stayed.
I played my laptop all night.
And I wasn't swayed,
By the animals trying to give me a fright.
I stayed awake,
I stayed in bed.
The sun didn't wake,
But it did in my head.
I got lost, on my way,
I tripped and stumbled.
I got dreary, but was okay.
Down the stairs I tumbled.
To the computer. the room,
Oh, how it was spinning.
I sat in my gloom.
But, I think I was grinning.
I was so very tired.
I got lost on the way to the bathroom.
I think my brain got rewired.
The shadows loom.
My computer is bright,
Against the dark.
I think it should be alright,
Till, I was eaten by a shark.
Gobbled whole.
I made no sound.
I waited in the troll,
Until I could look around.
But there was no light,
Not until I met a unicorn.
Who taught me the right,
And it told me to be warn.
I think I just joined a church,
Oops, but I got out okay.
I began to search,
And I met a turtle, I begged him to stay.
He sat by my side,
And I gave him a cookie.
He became my guide,
But he was a rookie.
We got lost in a house,
That I didn't recognize.
I met a mouse,
He led me out alive.
I got in bed, and I stayed.
I played my laptop all night.
And I wasn't swayed,
By the animals trying to give me a fright.
Anonymous
"Confusion Caused by the Lack of Sleep"
http://www.musclesprod.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/05/lack-of-sleep-300x204.jpg
I was really keyed up all day
last night,
and I'm still wide-awake.
Oh, here comes the sun again,
I watched her go down,
she's the same one that
rose yesterday
with the moon too.
Unless, somehow
they got switched
on the dark side
of the Earth,
then they would not be the same.
And how strange would that be?
Jeeeeeeesus,
I gotta get some sleep
today,
I mean tonight,
'cause these thoughts
are killing me,
throwing me off my game.
I'm not making any sense,
it's confusing me
let alone others,
and the dog smiling
at me over there.
http://www.musclesprod.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/05/lack-of-sleep-300x204.jpg
I was really keyed up all day
last night,
and I'm still wide-awake.
Oh, here comes the sun again,
I watched her go down,
she's the same one that
rose yesterday
with the moon too.
Unless, somehow
they got switched
on the dark side
of the Earth,
then they would not be the same.
And how strange would that be?
Jeeeeeeesus,
I gotta get some sleep
today,
I mean tonight,
'cause these thoughts
are killing me,
throwing me off my game.
I'm not making any sense,
it's confusing me
let alone others,
and the dog smiling
at me over there.
Anonymous
http://www.welovethisbook.com/sites/default/files/imagecache/node_view_photo/hallucinations%20oliver%20sachs.jpg
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I also am claiming a medical reason like IzzySky above.
It is also a warning to get help if this happens to you.
Mine happened many years ago - surprised the Doctors did not know.
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LACK OF SLEEP
Bipolar mania not understood
Went for a week without sleep
When they already knew
Lack of sleep could make you crazy
Panic attacks secondary to seeing
People in the rooms running after me
But they were not people
They were angels
Went to emergency
Where they thought it was nothing
Gave me one sleeping pill
Went home, still was ill
Started to feel nauseous
Could not eat, could not sleep
Watched a shut down TV
Talking to me
All this time I knew
I was hallucinating
Something was askew
My brain was reverberating
Throwing up and retching
Living in the bathroom
Trying to sleep on the floor
Cannot sleep no matter what
There is another angel
He is talking to me
Only I cannot really understand
Then he sits on an outside tree
This week finally ended
Never knew what started it
Did not get a diagnosis
Until many many years went by.....
http://graphics8.nytimes.com/images/2012/11/04/sunday-review/04HALLUCINATION/04HALLUCINATION-sfSpan.jpg
************************************************************
I also am claiming a medical reason like IzzySky above.
It is also a warning to get help if this happens to you.
Mine happened many years ago - surprised the Doctors did not know.
************************************************************
LACK OF SLEEP
Bipolar mania not understood
Went for a week without sleep
When they already knew
Lack of sleep could make you crazy
Panic attacks secondary to seeing
People in the rooms running after me
But they were not people
They were angels
Went to emergency
Where they thought it was nothing
Gave me one sleeping pill
Went home, still was ill
Started to feel nauseous
Could not eat, could not sleep
Watched a shut down TV
Talking to me
All this time I knew
I was hallucinating
Something was askew
My brain was reverberating
Throwing up and retching
Living in the bathroom
Trying to sleep on the floor
Cannot sleep no matter what
There is another angel
He is talking to me
Only I cannot really understand
Then he sits on an outside tree
This week finally ended
Never knew what started it
Did not get a diagnosis
Until many many years went by.....
http://graphics8.nytimes.com/images/2012/11/04/sunday-review/04HALLUCINATION/04HALLUCINATION-sfSpan.jpg
Waiting on the rain
I've been here before
waiting on the rain
watching people pick at each other
complaining about life's struggles
and love's battles
with their heart on their sleeves
shown to the world
it's free for the taking
use it
abuse the poor bastard
that just wants to be in love
it's funny how a few drops of rain
won't wash away the feelings
but will hide it
the sun will set on everyone
but the searching remains
for trust, love, life respect
a bunch of mice sharing a piece of cheese
in a small hole in the wall
with no exit
just an entrance
and they still find happiness
within
as I sit waiting on the rain
to heal my open scars
baring my soul naked to the drips
laying on the concrete
cold without shame
without a smile
or a tear
no care to enter the mouse trap
and be forever a slave to love
to people
I can be my best friend
my worse enemy
and my own lover
but it gets lonely
and I should just crawl into that hole
and die
with the believers
It's old but I did tell someone here that I wrote this after a long shift and no sleep for more then 24 hours I think it was 35 or 45 can't remember !!
I've been here before
waiting on the rain
watching people pick at each other
complaining about life's struggles
and love's battles
with their heart on their sleeves
shown to the world
it's free for the taking
use it
abuse the poor bastard
that just wants to be in love
it's funny how a few drops of rain
won't wash away the feelings
but will hide it
the sun will set on everyone
but the searching remains
for trust, love, life respect
a bunch of mice sharing a piece of cheese
in a small hole in the wall
with no exit
just an entrance
and they still find happiness
within
as I sit waiting on the rain
to heal my open scars
baring my soul naked to the drips
laying on the concrete
cold without shame
without a smile
or a tear
no care to enter the mouse trap
and be forever a slave to love
to people
I can be my best friend
my worse enemy
and my own lover
but it gets lonely
and I should just crawl into that hole
and die
with the believers
It's old but I did tell someone here that I wrote this after a long shift and no sleep for more then 24 hours I think it was 35 or 45 can't remember !!
Sleep Deprived With The Blood Shot Eyes
Once I smoked a shit load of crack
Crystal meth to you Yanks
Stayed up for a week no sleep
I think I ate a snag
Sausage to you Yanks
Guys can you take me home
Nah, we can drop you at the bus stop
The bus ride home...
Full of paranoia
Eyes judging me, stop looking at me
Home at last..now I can sleep
My walls are made of wispy crack smoke
Crack dragons and crack bears dance about
Fuck this I need sleep and lots of valium
Twenty four hours standing on my head
You don't mind if I abuse myself
So I can hold my head up,
Don't tell me this is paradise
Once I smoked a shit load of crack
Crystal meth to you Yanks
Stayed up for a week no sleep
I think I ate a snag
Sausage to you Yanks
Guys can you take me home
Nah, we can drop you at the bus stop
The bus ride home...
Full of paranoia
Eyes judging me, stop looking at me
Home at last..now I can sleep
My walls are made of wispy crack smoke
Crack dragons and crack bears dance about
Fuck this I need sleep and lots of valium
Twenty four hours standing on my head
You don't mind if I abuse myself
So I can hold my head up,
Don't tell me this is paradise
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