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Magdalena
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Acrostic-Tanka (modern tanka)

EngrVV
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Poetry Contest

Submit at least 3 modern tanka poems as described below:
I had a dream and in my dream I was called the "Father of Modern Tanka." I like to live that dream if I may, unless somebody say otherwise. I started as a twisted dreamer like everyone else (I guess), and now I'm a thought provoker. Let me start by provoking your profound thoughts to a new depth.

Traditional tanka consists of 5 lines with 31 syllables with the 1st and 3rd line having 5 syllables each and the rest have 7 each (5-7-5-7-7) which usually covers topics about love and nature. My modern tanka which I called acrostic-tanka is a hybrid of acrostic poetry in tanka form which covers any topic using a 5-letter word and somehow its lyrics must connote relevance if not directly equivalent to the meaning of the word.

For example:

1) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/76642-fauna-in-tanka-form/

2) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/75718-trust/

3) http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/76016-lover-in-tanka-form/

Competition ends: Jan. 02, 2013

Happy tanka and a joyous season to all my fellow dreamers...

( I would like to acknowledge our fellow resident poets, Mr. Bruce Burkard who introduced me to traditional tanka and JAZZMANOR who brought acrostic poetry to my attention. Since then, I had fun doing this coz' it's a good mental exercise. You should try it too!)

Devilish
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5-7-5-7-7...

Consent..

it's like a hunger
starvation settling in
deep down inside her
the host sets up a sick scene
just to feel her breathe. no more

I love to learn did I do this right?

EngrVV
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Thanks Devilish for getting this competition off the ground. It's a nice one... but let me make it clear. While your work is in traditional tanka, I specifically ask for a modern form of tanka which is a 5-letter word (since tanka consists of 5 lines) and you have to use those 5 letters as a start for each lines. Please click on link in my examples above. (TRUST, LOVER, FAUNA, etc.)

Devilish
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Ohh ok ..i usually do miss something by being overly anxious..lol. i'll try again..

poet Anonymous

"Blood(lines)"
http://www.edeninitiative.org/images/life_senior.jpg
Believe we’re all one
Lost in a complex story
Only the wise think
Onward to see the glory
Death is really beginning

poet Anonymous

“(I Love) Music”
http://blogs.thenews.com.pk/blogs/wp-content/uploads/2012/06/CUPID.jpg
Melody is grand
Utilizes all power
Seen so deep within
Is key to enlightenment
Cupid is the message here

poet Anonymous

"Weird (Crazy Poet)"

We’re all a bit touched
Everyone writes their own story
Is poetry strange?
Remembering ones feelings
Decide for yourself the right

Devilish
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Strider you are a force to be reckoned .. wow. beautiful.

poet Anonymous

Devilish said:Strider you are a force to be reckoned .. wow. beautiful.

As Pearl Jam would say, Even Flow...Thanks DevIlish.

Strider :)

Magdalena
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I double checked my syllable count with an on-line counter after I wrote my three. All as they should be


Death


Darkest kissed shadows
Elevate your spirit up
A force of Grim's hand
Touched your soul ripping it free
Hells fire you are heading for

Magdalena
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Storm


Silent as it creeps
Twisting through cloud forms moving
Over oceans vast and wild
Racing toward land crashing
Madness erupts on lightening cries

Magdalena
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Ocean



Out across vast open water
Casting lines to hungry eyes
Eager open mouths bite
Attached by steel struggle lost
Now gutted by their captors

misscellany
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sometimes i sit here
holding bloodthirsty steelpens
all for the comfort.
reality; i'd like to
pierce a something beating

EngrVV
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Thanks Strider, Magdalena and anna grin for your beautiful tanka poems...I think Devilish is ready for her entry. Do you guys have fun doing this as compared to traditional tanka? I would like to hear your opinions. Sometimes I do this while at a traffic stop, trying to count the syllables while tapping on the steering wheel until I would hear a loud honk from behind (LOL), it's green light!

Devilish
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Force

Fucked by rotation
Overly anxious in need
Ravage a rhythm
Covered by blankets can't breathe
Epic devotion.. she feeds


Got it. thank you much.

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