Poetry competition CLOSED 30th March 2012 3:08am
WINNER
mitchryan549 (Mitchell Ryan)
mitchryan549 (Mitchell Ryan)
RUNNER-UP:
mjs211
Damn It This Should Have Won
OK entries are closed. This is not going to be an easy one. Many people put forward some exceptional work on this. If I could I would award a 5 way tie, but I can't, and it wouldn't be fair. I will have to spend 24-48 hours reading the entries again B4 deciding.
OK since this is a contest where people went back to their old writing and picked their favorite unloved children. I can't just vote without a few explanations.
Keys and Gloves - great poem I have added it to my reading list. Though you posted it quickly it was so strong that it still was in my mind for the 5 way tie I mentioned above, unfortunately we can't have a tie.
Eric - I can tell that you put an exceeding amount of care into this one. It was not just another seduction poem. One of your goodest ones.
Paul - Unusually dark for you. Nice write. Interesting concept.
Paige - this is a very powerful piece. If I could have judged this contest based upon honesty and emotions alone, this would have been my pick. Another in my mythical 5-way tie.
October Arts - Great poem. It expresses a sentiment we all share. We are here to read about us and to feel less alone.
Nameless - Drift. This is very original. It reminds me of "Falling" by James Dickey.
Atropabelladonna - Fresh, unusual and heartless. I wouldn't expect anything less from you.
13- Another gem from you. It is dense, powerful and angry. Good job.
Kitty - Another strong candidate in your tireless campaign to expose social ills in poetry. Nice read.
Mitchell - I never would have thought that a small poem that rhymes and compares a woman with a robot would be one of my favorites. Since by the time you read this you will know that you have won, I will give the only criticism that I am giving here in this little speech. I scan one too many syllables in the last line. I would consider removing "all" or changing "you are" to "you're." Other than that this had both a theme behind it. It had a suppressed but ever-present emotional tone from the speaker who feels rejected. Above all it had a careful crafting that surpassed every other poem. Although I've said that rhyme never helped a poem, I also said that I have allegiance only to the best poem, and that is exactly what you had. Give the man a star.
Milkyway - Uplifting love poem. I assume you passed this back and forth adding one stanza at a time? I don' t really know how a collab. works, but it was a good read.
Magician Type - I didn't see your question hidden down there until I did the judging, sorry.
Miss_Sub - Addiction. I know not of this addiction. Just kidding. "pissing on the doors of memory, homeless veins" great images. Chillingly addicted. Both inviting and spiteful.
flightlessangel - Original and well crafted take on the zombie theme. Just when you think the world has finally beaten this subject to death, it stands up and here it comes again.
dustyjjewels - You don't see many poems about gambling addiction. I thought it was a drug poem at first.
Mike - Of all of the poems, this had the best concept behind it, and almost the best realization of the concept. It was a very close second place. Very tight. It is in my reading list... and if Mitchell hadn't ruined it for you. It would have won.
kourtnissixxx - Definitely soaked in meaning, and emotion... especially regret. It is moving and gritty at the same time.
Johnny - Yes you are a control subject... almost as if you were in some sort of... contest. Cool poem.
JAITO - Sorry one entry per person. You never got back to me with a post or a PM.
PierreTheMad - Strong entry. Tight, compact in both emotion and words. Gives us a false sense that we know what emotions are expected and heightens them with the second stanza. Strong.
opheliac - Again if I could 5-way tie a winner. For the ratio of meaning, imagery, and emotion for each word it is a winner. It also is in my reading list.
lightbaron - Your quirky words and strange charm work their poetic magic again here. I really love the way each line builds off the previous.
Student - You are right. Writing a good love poem that is still original is a chore. You can only approach the subject indirectly. Concise, well written, and original.
Thorne - Cool poem. I was admiring it from a distance the first time that I saw it, but neglected to comment then. The style and repetition really sell the emotion.
So there you have it
Mitchell first. Mike second. Paige, opheliac and keys with honorable mention.
Keys and Gloves - great poem I have added it to my reading list. Though you posted it quickly it was so strong that it still was in my mind for the 5 way tie I mentioned above, unfortunately we can't have a tie.
Eric - I can tell that you put an exceeding amount of care into this one. It was not just another seduction poem. One of your goodest ones.
Paul - Unusually dark for you. Nice write. Interesting concept.
Paige - this is a very powerful piece. If I could have judged this contest based upon honesty and emotions alone, this would have been my pick. Another in my mythical 5-way tie.
October Arts - Great poem. It expresses a sentiment we all share. We are here to read about us and to feel less alone.
Nameless - Drift. This is very original. It reminds me of "Falling" by James Dickey.
Atropabelladonna - Fresh, unusual and heartless. I wouldn't expect anything less from you.
13- Another gem from you. It is dense, powerful and angry. Good job.
Kitty - Another strong candidate in your tireless campaign to expose social ills in poetry. Nice read.
Mitchell - I never would have thought that a small poem that rhymes and compares a woman with a robot would be one of my favorites. Since by the time you read this you will know that you have won, I will give the only criticism that I am giving here in this little speech. I scan one too many syllables in the last line. I would consider removing "all" or changing "you are" to "you're." Other than that this had both a theme behind it. It had a suppressed but ever-present emotional tone from the speaker who feels rejected. Above all it had a careful crafting that surpassed every other poem. Although I've said that rhyme never helped a poem, I also said that I have allegiance only to the best poem, and that is exactly what you had. Give the man a star.
Milkyway - Uplifting love poem. I assume you passed this back and forth adding one stanza at a time? I don' t really know how a collab. works, but it was a good read.
Magician Type - I didn't see your question hidden down there until I did the judging, sorry.
Miss_Sub - Addiction. I know not of this addiction. Just kidding. "pissing on the doors of memory, homeless veins" great images. Chillingly addicted. Both inviting and spiteful.
flightlessangel - Original and well crafted take on the zombie theme. Just when you think the world has finally beaten this subject to death, it stands up and here it comes again.
dustyjjewels - You don't see many poems about gambling addiction. I thought it was a drug poem at first.
Mike - Of all of the poems, this had the best concept behind it, and almost the best realization of the concept. It was a very close second place. Very tight. It is in my reading list... and if Mitchell hadn't ruined it for you. It would have won.
kourtnissixxx - Definitely soaked in meaning, and emotion... especially regret. It is moving and gritty at the same time.
Johnny - Yes you are a control subject... almost as if you were in some sort of... contest. Cool poem.
JAITO - Sorry one entry per person. You never got back to me with a post or a PM.
PierreTheMad - Strong entry. Tight, compact in both emotion and words. Gives us a false sense that we know what emotions are expected and heightens them with the second stanza. Strong.
opheliac - Again if I could 5-way tie a winner. For the ratio of meaning, imagery, and emotion for each word it is a winner. It also is in my reading list.
lightbaron - Your quirky words and strange charm work their poetic magic again here. I really love the way each line builds off the previous.
Student - You are right. Writing a good love poem that is still original is a chore. You can only approach the subject indirectly. Concise, well written, and original.
Thorne - Cool poem. I was admiring it from a distance the first time that I saw it, but neglected to comment then. The style and repetition really sell the emotion.
So there you have it
Mitchell first. Mike second. Paige, opheliac and keys with honorable mention.
