Poetry competition CLOSED 21st December 2023 1:47pm
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wallyroo92
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A twisted Sonnet

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Shakespeare's must

 Courage. and fill each empty theatre seat  
a face of of tragedy and comedy  
wringing emotions, from the crowd that peep  
players set with with words of alchemy  
   
Vest the manuscript with a plot thats bold  
twists and turns with malevolence churned  
cheers and boos, crowd hot then cold
great tales with some outcomes unconfirmed  
   
For its a brilliance none can match  
 mask, of grins and tears always prevail  
heroic death fall on a sword perhaps  
 turn ones hand to a Shakespearian tale  
   
The devil feed my quill with blooded ink  
God to temper conscience while I think    
 
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sorry PAR it never occurred to me that you don't know how sonnets are written.

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PAULO ACACIO RAMOS
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Maybe I don't or maybe I do... I think judgement is up to you.

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Perception

The rain has stopped and left a fresh perfume
A scent that makes me feel both calm and close
It smells like earth and flowers in full bloom
That lingers in the air and fills my nose

The beauty of this natural delight
But you, my dear, do not appreciate
A chemical reaction, nothing bright
You say it's just a sign of changing state

You call it preposterous petrichor perception
A fancy phrase for something plain and dull
You think it's just a matter of deception
A trick of mind that makes the senses lull

But I, my love, do not agree with you
I think it's more than molecules and dew
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Thank you PAR for your contribution

slipalong
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sometimes just the accknowedgment of an an entry, its seems that are enjoyed by some contestants A real boost to the confidence to perhaps submit to a further competition by the setter !!!!

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Sorry, sorry, slipalong yours somehow slipped through the cracks.
Thank you kindly for joining in.

Notreallyme
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My Vessle

They always say 'Treat your body like a temple, it should be worshiped' but they are lying
Temples can be broken down, restored, broken down again and restored once more, but that doesnt change the damage done to it
Because it will never be the same Temple it once was

When i was a child, the weight of living, trapped in human confindes, didnt drag me down, or even bothered me
But now that is all i think about
I want to break out of my own skin
And to finally be free of this painful thing we call living

I want to rest, to finally not have to deal with the constant positivity of other people
How can they love life when it is so utterly exhausting?

My vessle is useless and i wish to discard it
I wish to leave my mortal vessle behind and finally rest back to the place i came from
I have never been accepted by anyone, but Mother Nature will always have a place for me and welcome my  soul with open arms once i return back to her

(Im sorry if this was too long or bad i wrote this in a rush😭)

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I thank you kindly for your
sensitive offering but the
competition wants a ranting
& raving sonnet. A twisted Sonnet.

Perhaps it would fit better in another
competition?

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Thank you for the feedback!!
Im still relatively new to poetry and dont quite understand everything yet but thanks for telling me (:

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This is how I'll work it out
using a point system.

1 point for an entry
2 points for rant
3 points for form

No one got less than 3 points

Ties for highest score will be reread
and more points added until a clear winner shows.

So far at  11:30 a.m.thu Dec 21. I've got the following ties to reread.

Jordon. Josh. MidnightSonneteer. wallyroo92.  ajay. MadameLavender. AnonymousBystander. slipalong. PAR.

wallyroo92 is the winner.

Jordan & Josh runners up.

MidnightSonneteer. Highly stylised, incisive, but ultimately too high brow for a rant.
Ajay a good sensitive but low key rant.
Madame lavender seems to be too well bred to rant. A lovely piece though.
AnonymousBystander. I don't know the story but it seems more of a lament than rant.
slipalong this came across as an invocation, a spell, rather than rant.
PAR A gentle giant rant. Little more than a telling off.

Time constraints keep me from commenting on all those who did their own highly entertaining but ultimately their own individual thing but I thank you one and all for taking part. And these few notes are my attempt to not leave any one out. No one gets left out.

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