I enjoyed the sway of this piece.
The rhyming makes it seem more innocent, whilst the content is dark.

Favorite stanza:

My arm's a violin,
my blade the bow,
as I play my song of shame

Wish that I had written it.

Scribbler.

Filled with emotion & wonderfully penned. Love the first stanza, in particular! Great job! :)
Carlene

Powerful imagery- espeially the first stanza. In your second, perhaps if you ever revisit the work- I think it might be more powerful if you could somehow change the third line to something more connected to the music imagery of the first stanza- something to think about perhaps.
"I dream of cuts too deep"- excellent and evocative- though, I fear I must be honest and say that I found the last two stanzas- a bit too "easy"- a bit too cliche. I wouldn't mention this except that from your first stanza it's obvious you are better than that-don't be afraid- trust in your talent - and don't settle for the expected- if the emotions are real- the words must evoke not only those emotions but the truth behind them! Looking forward to reading more of your work!

Thanks guys and thank you LeMuseNoir for the advice I'll for sure rework this :)