alone (poor man's wisdom)

Great stuff! Mainstream society doesn't want to hear the inconsequential blabberings of the self. It prefers a tight ship, streamlined and efficient, that promotes a manufactured robotic existence. Any diviation from the norm isn't tolerated. I enjoyed this! Thank you for sharing!

Thanks, man.
Mainstream poetry is far too simple and there's no need to be worrying about what they want.

Glad you stopped by.

aint that d'troot...

Mr A

this is real good. relate-able in the context of gaining that understanding or introspection when in the middle of said hiss.


I'll be honest and say I think you made an error at that break, I figure you'd be better making it at 'understand you' because it kind of finishes that part of the thought.

"then you're" (an option)   'child-ear' up to yourself, I immediately thought child like ear for some reason.

anyway man, glad I came and saw.

good stuff, shine on  

Yeah that break. I wanted the poem to have a kind of offbeat effect and originally the poem ended with "then you are" without me writing "alone" as it's the title then I added that second chunk for some reason but still hoped that the ending of the first stanza would relay back to the title and step to the last bit.
 
Couldn't think of another way to write 'child-ear' without it implying a child's ear.
 
Thanks for your suggestions, man. I'll mull.

sweet bitta'sweet
inSight....wellSaid briefness

Thankya kindly, saxman.

Well enough said. Just out there and no bullshit.
keep it up.
Deep read

Keep it up isn't so easy. :)

Thanks, clio.

In a nut-shell, those words example me so perfectly, I relate to it so well it almost as if my other half wrote the poem :)

Well that can't of been me because I'm still a whole. :)

Thank you for relating, and saying so

a very good poem with a very visual ending.
but it's not just "poor man' wisdom" is it? what happened to equality!

Equality? Why do you think the word "poor" exists? Nothing is equal in humanity.

Thanks for your kind comment, oph.

i meant equality between men and women!