Gothic Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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gothic seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 4:08pm
12th Sep 2024 4:08pm
Shade Between Shadows
In the rift where shadows split
Where angles writhe and forms commit
To twisting paths of maddened flight
In shades that crawl beyond the night
Abyssal lines that tear and fray
Unholy curves that twist the day
No mortal mind could bear the sight
Of darkness folded, turned to blight
The pillars bend with jagged spite
Where geometry corrupts the light
A latticework of eldritch might
That pierces through the heart of sight
No sacred plane remains intact
...
Where angles writhe and forms commit
To twisting paths of maddened flight
In shades that crawl beyond the night
Abyssal lines that tear and fray
Unholy curves that twist the day
No mortal mind could bear the sight
Of darkness folded, turned to blight
The pillars bend with jagged spite
Where geometry corrupts the light
A latticework of eldritch might
That pierces through the heart of sight
No sacred plane remains intact
...
#dark
#gothic
#shadows #universe
#shadows #universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 5:18am
12th Sep 2024 5:18am
The Emperor's Angels
Iron halls and stone keep
Where saints and devils vigil keep
The Emperor's wrath in armor clad
Awaken from the battle’s mad
With sigils carved in blood and flame
They march where mortal tongues won’t name
The Angels forged in terror’s breath
The harbingers of crimson death
Their shadows stretch like whispered sins
Where holy light and night begins
For they are wrath and judgment's hand
The sentinels of a burning land
Their eyes aflame with ancient lore
Baptized in war forevermore
They chant in tongues of lost occult ...
Where saints and devils vigil keep
The Emperor's wrath in armor clad
Awaken from the battle’s mad
With sigils carved in blood and flame
They march where mortal tongues won’t name
The Angels forged in terror’s breath
The harbingers of crimson death
Their shadows stretch like whispered sins
Where holy light and night begins
For they are wrath and judgment's hand
The sentinels of a burning land
Their eyes aflame with ancient lore
Baptized in war forevermore
They chant in tongues of lost occult ...
#dark
#death
#fiction
#gothic
#shadows
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Sep 2024 5:07pm
6th Sep 2024 5:07pm
Diabolical Oculus
They walk behind with stolen tread
A mirror’s shade of pallid dread
No breath to speak, no eye to see
Yet mock the soul in mockery
They stalk the steps where shadows creep
And haunt the corners dark and deep
With hollow eyes and voiceless call
They mimic life, yet not at all
By Babylon's rivers, dark and wide
They steal the visions prophets cried
Like Jeremiah’s weeping scroll
They haunt the pathways of the soul
They carry words like whispers thin
With hints of wrath and hidden sin
Each gesture wrong, each smile askew...
A mirror’s shade of pallid dread
No breath to speak, no eye to see
Yet mock the soul in mockery
They stalk the steps where shadows creep
And haunt the corners dark and deep
With hollow eyes and voiceless call
They mimic life, yet not at all
By Babylon's rivers, dark and wide
They steal the visions prophets cried
Like Jeremiah’s weeping scroll
They haunt the pathways of the soul
They carry words like whispers thin
With hints of wrath and hidden sin
Each gesture wrong, each smile askew...
#dark
#ghosts
#gothic
#rhyming
#symbolism
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Sep 2024 5:28am
6th Sep 2024 5:28am
A Body Ravaged
Beneath the moon’s unblinking eye
Where shadows coil and secrets lie
The circle drawn in ashen white
A dance of flesh, a whispered rite
The air is thick with iron’s scent
A hymn to pain, a heart’s lament
The veil of night drapes cold and thin
A shiver crawls beneath the skin
The watchers chant with breath held tight
A dirge of loss, an endless night
In hands they clutch the tools of sin
The silver keen, the serpent’s grin
No cries, no screams, just muffled sighs ...
Where shadows coil and secrets lie
The circle drawn in ashen white
A dance of flesh, a whispered rite
The air is thick with iron’s scent
A hymn to pain, a heart’s lament
The veil of night drapes cold and thin
A shiver crawls beneath the skin
The watchers chant with breath held tight
A dirge of loss, an endless night
In hands they clutch the tools of sin
The silver keen, the serpent’s grin
No cries, no screams, just muffled sighs ...
#dark
#gothic
#historical #rhyming
#historical #rhyming
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deadwolf
Poem Published
4th Sep 2024 9:58pm
4th Sep 2024 9:58pm
Death Came for Me
Sitting here, drinking wine,
Drinking wine, death came for me,
death came for me;
Yesterday, enfolded in gentle rain, as never before, ready to die, yesterday
Yesterday it came for me, yesterday;
Where now does freedom lie, beyond where
```~~~…Where beyond dust of bones eyes are crystallized…~~~```
Crystallized, she came for me, ready to die, we traveled light
Skin gone cold,
Strangely cold
```~~~…We do weep, we do weep…~~~```
```~~~…Lord; help our...
Drinking wine, death came for me,
death came for me;
Yesterday, enfolded in gentle rain, as never before, ready to die, yesterday
Yesterday it came for me, yesterday;
Where now does freedom lie, beyond where
```~~~…Where beyond dust of bones eyes are crystallized…~~~```
Crystallized, she came for me, ready to die, we traveled light
Skin gone cold,
Strangely cold
```~~~…We do weep, we do weep…~~~```
```~~~…Lord; help our...
#death
#friendship
#gothic
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
2nd Sep 2024 5:34am
2nd Sep 2024 5:34am
Carpathian Noble
Surrounded by an aura’s gentle light
Yet shadows deep doth watch with hungry eye
In secret, biding time till waning night
And softly whispers, “Come, sweet dark, draw nigh.”
“Mournful night, thou art a siren’s call
Thy sable beauty doth my soul enthrall
I feel thy breath upon mine pallid skin
A tempest stirred in darkness deep within.”
An angel once, now tethered by desire
His noble heart consumed by shadow’s fire
Bewitched by whispers drifting on the...
Yet shadows deep doth watch with hungry eye
In secret, biding time till waning night
And softly whispers, “Come, sweet dark, draw nigh.”
“Mournful night, thou art a siren’s call
Thy sable beauty doth my soul enthrall
I feel thy breath upon mine pallid skin
A tempest stirred in darkness deep within.”
An angel once, now tethered by desire
His noble heart consumed by shadow’s fire
Bewitched by whispers drifting on the...
#dark
#gothic
#narrative #rhyming
#narrative #rhyming
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
29th Aug 2024 7:21pm
29th Aug 2024 7:21pm
Rob
dirty man, I see you sulking in the background
terrorizing my sex
teasing my cunt, no prettier way of saying that
you're a bad man I want to fuck
get inside your mind
write about my pink pleasure
stalking my visions
I always see you there on my periphery
lewd dude it's what you do to me
I'm madness, you know me
don't summon my demoness
unless you intend to please her
make it a religious event
release that pent-up devil
in my hedonistic slot
you're the boogie man
I'm the seductress...
terrorizing my sex
teasing my cunt, no prettier way of saying that
you're a bad man I want to fuck
get inside your mind
write about my pink pleasure
stalking my visions
I always see you there on my periphery
lewd dude it's what you do to me
I'm madness, you know me
don't summon my demoness
unless you intend to please her
make it a religious event
release that pent-up devil
in my hedonistic slot
you're the boogie man
I'm the seductress...
#gothic
204 reads
2 Comments
deadwolf
Poem Published
24th Aug 2024 8:51pm
24th Aug 2024 8:51pm
Random thoughts #68
Words I find, too hard to say,
And youthful passions that cannot not die
Like tarnished silver, in my hand
For I have somethings left undone
My long lost days of a boy’s life,
Shall I compare
what was lost, for what was gained
As the years, went slowly by,
For boys dreams are unbound
In endless possibility
Not like an older man’s dreams turned nightmare
Filled of missed chances
Haunted by words, why & what if
For once I felt I carried the world
And the sun did not rise or set without me
Wistful regrets
Of...
And youthful passions that cannot not die
Like tarnished silver, in my hand
For I have somethings left undone
My long lost days of a boy’s life,
Shall I compare
what was lost, for what was gained
As the years, went slowly by,
For boys dreams are unbound
In endless possibility
Not like an older man’s dreams turned nightmare
Filled of missed chances
Haunted by words, why & what if
For once I felt I carried the world
And the sun did not rise or set without me
Wistful regrets
Of...
#aging
#gothic
#LifeCycle
251 reads
5 Comments
BrokenHierophant
Poem Published
20th Aug 2024 9:50pm
20th Aug 2024 9:50pm
Castles And Hills
#gothic
#horror
#love
110 reads
0 Comments
deadwolf
Poem Published
20th Aug 2024 12:38pm
20th Aug 2024 12:38pm
Midnight Ramblins #77
R.I.P.
deadwolf… 1777 - ?
`~,,~`
Salt over the shoulder,
Brick powder grounded
On the threshold of your door
Witch,
Burn all the cedar & sage you want bitch,
I will return,
As long and dark
As the winter's solstice,
And with all the powers of the night;
```~~~… … …~~~```
deadwolf… 1777 - ?
`~,,~`
Salt over the shoulder,
Brick powder grounded
On the threshold of your door
Witch,
Burn all the cedar & sage you want bitch,
I will return,
As long and dark
As the winter's solstice,
And with all the powers of the night;
```~~~… … …~~~```
#gothic
#prose
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3 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
15th Aug 2024 2:38am
15th Aug 2024 2:38am
centuries go by
minutes go by it feels like forever counting down the days until you return
exhausted memory my faith is slipping into the void
where all of my fears are numbered in the numb
I can still hear your voice with a vow
I will find you through the centuries
cursed for our love of each other
a spell cast upon us we would never see each other again
I feel you close now
your movements in the eternal excite me maybe I think
we have held each other cruelly not knowing
forced to battle each other
our memories stolen and rearranged
...
exhausted memory my faith is slipping into the void
where all of my fears are numbered in the numb
I can still hear your voice with a vow
I will find you through the centuries
cursed for our love of each other
a spell cast upon us we would never see each other again
I feel you close now
your movements in the eternal excite me maybe I think
we have held each other cruelly not knowing
forced to battle each other
our memories stolen and rearranged
...
#gothic
#love
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
12th Aug 2024 11:42pm
12th Aug 2024 11:42pm
gothic
grievous dark becomes my soul
so tight with feeling
quietly I dream it's light outside
trembling in the cold
a memory out of place
tiny pride seems so loud to be so small
effective neediness comes undone
deathly affections when I'm standing still
a remarkable want sees me moving forward
through self-hate and a rebellious mind
dictating I suffer for my future to be understood
inflicted flesh I am not beautiful
I'm found awkwardly appealing
drawn to fondling the dark I conceal
gawking lewdly at what...
so tight with feeling
quietly I dream it's light outside
trembling in the cold
a memory out of place
tiny pride seems so loud to be so small
effective neediness comes undone
deathly affections when I'm standing still
a remarkable want sees me moving forward
through self-hate and a rebellious mind
dictating I suffer for my future to be understood
inflicted flesh I am not beautiful
I'm found awkwardly appealing
drawn to fondling the dark I conceal
gawking lewdly at what...
#gothic
#love
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