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rude awakening
Entered in Competition For People With No Trophies
she's trapped in a
pointless marriage
with no one to turn to
and sadly no one to care
he is too but it
hasn't dawned on him yet
what is the meaning of love
and is no one willing to
risk anything anymore
i can not help her for
i, too, am losing
my faith in love
i've loved too many men
who never loved me back
and i've taken comfort
in what little
security there is
in friendship
she's trapped in a
pointless marriage
with no one to turn to
and sadly no one to care
he is too but it
hasn't dawned on him yet
what is the meaning of love
and is no one willing to
risk anything anymore
i can not help her for
i, too, am losing
my faith in love
i've loved too many men
who never loved me back
and i've taken comfort
in what little
security there is
in friendship
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Re: rude awakening
4th Feb 2013 4:29pm
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4th Feb 2013 4:34pm
Re: rude awakening
Anonymous
4th Feb 2013 5:00pm
Oooh, what a piece.
Cuts deep, must say...especially that part where ...he doesn't know it yet...wow.
Swell write, F.
Pen on, dear!
Tidespotter
Ps. Real glad to see you again, Faith... after DUP's brief...er....lapse...
:-)
Cuts deep, must say...especially that part where ...he doesn't know it yet...wow.
Swell write, F.
Pen on, dear!
Tidespotter
Ps. Real glad to see you again, Faith... after DUP's brief...er....lapse...
:-)
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re: Re: rude awakening
5th Feb 2013 3:07pm
Re: rude awakening
Anonymous
4th Feb 2013 5:15pm
An excellent write, Faith. Great opening/closing lines & very effective word choices/ideas in this piece. That the marriage is "pointless" is very telling. And "with no one to turn to / and sadly no one to care" does happen far too often. Love the poem! :)
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re: Re: rude awakening
5th Feb 2013 3:10pm
Thank you so much for your wonderful remarks, Carlene. Always a pleasure to see you have stopped by. So happy you liked the poem that much. :)
Faith
Faith
Re: rude awakening
4th Feb 2013 5:47pm
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5th Feb 2013 3:11pm
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5th Feb 2013 3:20pm
Re: rude awakening
5th Feb 2013 3:09pm
Rude awakenings are often the hardest to bounce back from! You scribe this wonderfully Faith!
Great Read! :)
Great Read! :)
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5th Feb 2013 3:34pm