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And As the earth rumbled and the clouds did part
The sky tuned red and the world went dark
The goodness did vanish and demons awoke
Amongst the cold silence, within the black smoke
As existence did shatter all that was once is no more
Just a mere grain of dirt on Satan’s cold floor
The sky tuned red and the world went dark
The goodness did vanish and demons awoke
Amongst the cold silence, within the black smoke
As existence did shatter all that was once is no more
Just a mere grain of dirt on Satan’s cold floor
Published 15th Jan 2013
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- Edited 15th Jan 2013 8:57pm
15th Jan 2013 8:56pm
Love the cadence of these lines. The scene described is riveting. Fatalistic, but in a good way. I like the way it's worded.
Question on the last line.. it's good but the "grain of dirt" doesn't seem to fit the rest? Kind of like going from a panoramic view to a single pixel. Maybe this was the intention?
Question on the last line.. it's good but the "grain of dirt" doesn't seem to fit the rest? Kind of like going from a panoramic view to a single pixel. Maybe this was the intention?
