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Release
The razor; sharp against my skin.
A guillotine with pendulum force
Deliberately pushing back and forth.
Premeditated and calculating.
Gnawing and grinding
Melodic and mezmorizing.
The pain slithers from its nest
At the bottom of the pit
Squeezing life from the branch
And vines that support it
Cells catch on the scales leaving
A path, brightly glowing
Red from the reaping.
Marks that remain are worth
The serpent completing its course.
Finally find calm within
A guillotine with pendulum force
Deliberately pushing back and forth.
Premeditated and calculating.
Gnawing and grinding
Melodic and mezmorizing.
The pain slithers from its nest
At the bottom of the pit
Squeezing life from the branch
And vines that support it
Cells catch on the scales leaving
A path, brightly glowing
Red from the reaping.
Marks that remain are worth
The serpent completing its course.
Finally find calm within
Published 8th Jan 2013
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2013 5:28pm
Gloriously dark! Nicely penned!
Thank you. I appreciate your comment! I just started writing, so any suggestions you may have are gladly appreciated as well :)
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Jan 2013 10:28pm
8th Jan 2013 10:27pm
I love the element of horror, here! Great metaphor, too, of pain as something that "slithers from its nest." Excellent imagery as in: "Red from the reaping."
Love the alliteration in these lines:
Gnawing and grinding
Melodic and mezmorizing.
Great poem & very well done, Gulac! Especially, as you say, you have 'just started writing'. :)
Carlene
Love the alliteration in these lines:
Gnawing and grinding
Melodic and mezmorizing.
Great poem & very well done, Gulac! Especially, as you say, you have 'just started writing'. :)
Carlene
9th Jan 2013 7:37am
