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Intoxicating Paradise
The aqua Akua adorns Linohau.
In awe I watch its absolute light creep over the sapphire waters,
As everything is immersed in its luscious rays.
I am trapped by the irresistible pull of nature,
As the alluring concoction of the rain of Lanipili and spray of the ehukai titillate my senses I stand and absorb it all.
With its regalia, Akua dominates the night sky.
Being engulfed in its beauty which no words can describe
Time becomes lost to me.
Hearing the water lap against the shore while the trees sway in the mystifying breeze creates utter calm in my mind.
This is when I understand where my place of peace resides;
My intoxicating paradise,
In the land of my ancestors, the land of my blood,
Which will linger forever within the sheltered glass beholding the sands of time.
In awe I watch its absolute light creep over the sapphire waters,
As everything is immersed in its luscious rays.
I am trapped by the irresistible pull of nature,
As the alluring concoction of the rain of Lanipili and spray of the ehukai titillate my senses I stand and absorb it all.
With its regalia, Akua dominates the night sky.
Being engulfed in its beauty which no words can describe
Time becomes lost to me.
Hearing the water lap against the shore while the trees sway in the mystifying breeze creates utter calm in my mind.
This is when I understand where my place of peace resides;
My intoxicating paradise,
In the land of my ancestors, the land of my blood,
Which will linger forever within the sheltered glass beholding the sands of time.
Published 28th Nov 2012
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29th Nov 2012 2:34am
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yeah, I thought this was alright. your descriptions gave me a "feel good" sense about "your" paradise. thought you could've shortened/ broken up a verse or two. kinda started to veer off in travel brochure land for a hot second. overall, i thought this was pretty good, not great, but a nice write...but what do i know??
continue to do & be you...and grow!
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yeah, I thought this was alright. your descriptions gave me a "feel good" sense about "your" paradise. thought you could've shortened/ broken up a verse or two. kinda started to veer off in travel brochure land for a hot second. overall, i thought this was pretty good, not great, but a nice write...but what do i know??
continue to do & be you...and grow!
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29th Nov 2012 8:05am
Okay I have to be honest, I love this comment it made me smile; thanks for stopping by and leaving an honest opinion :)
~ Mystic ~
~ Mystic ~
2nd Dec 2012 2:23am
I felt comfortable in your paradise...
could literally smell the intoxicating aromas.
It is winter here... :-)
could literally smell the intoxicating aromas.
It is winter here... :-)
2nd Dec 2012 8:13am
I'm glad that I could share a piece of my home with you and thank you for stopping by. :)
~ Mystic ~
~ Mystic ~
16th May 2013 9:03am
