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lovely
Lovely,
Just lovely.
Flaws make your beauty
Therefore your flawless
Heartless, poison runs through your veins
Your kiss just a bit colder than deaths
Let me freeze in your embrace
And turn to stone with your stare
I've learned not to care
Oh boy..boy oh boy
You're lovely,
Just lovely.
Just lovely.
Flaws make your beauty
Therefore your flawless
Heartless, poison runs through your veins
Your kiss just a bit colder than deaths
Let me freeze in your embrace
And turn to stone with your stare
I've learned not to care
Oh boy..boy oh boy
You're lovely,
Just lovely.
Published 17th Oct 2012
| Edited 18th Oct 2012
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17th Oct 2012 4:30pm
I love how you play out a reality here. An in your face truth with a hint of sarcasm! Wonderfully done ... Thanks for taking time to read my poem as well lunabella! ... blessing
18th Oct 2012 7:18am
I think in L4 your should change "ur" to "you're". It would make it seem less like a text and more like the beautiful love poem that it is. Good work, and welcome to DUP Luna. :)
AlwaysCaliban
AlwaysCaliban
18th Oct 2012 4:54pm
18th Oct 2012 4:56pm
Love these lines:
Heartless, poison runs through your veins
Your kiss just a bit colder than deaths
Welcome to DUP, lunabella...
Heartless, poison runs through your veins
Your kiss just a bit colder than deaths
Welcome to DUP, lunabella...
18th Oct 2012 4:59pm
