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27th Sep 2012 5:27pm
To me this reads like the start to three different poems. I think you could elaborate a bit more on that feeling of bliss and then describe in more detail what that person does to arouse the responses. The reference to love songs just seems out of place without more depth to your intense feelings.
27th Sep 2012 9:27pm
Yea I kinda did put it together like that but it's about one person kinda is just describing a day I just spent with him but thank you for the constructive criticism :)
