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The movement of the ride
On me you move
I read your body signs
Every inch I feel with your movement
Time stops
I read your body signs
Every inch I feel with your movement
Time stops
Published 26th Jun 2012
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27th Jun 2012 11:53am
Time stops. I wish this had another verse. It's just waiting. Such a pregnant pause.
14th Jul 2012 9:53pm
Hi thank you for the feedback,
I was trying to convey the perfect moment with someone and how time stops dead for a few moments, such as when you feel you love for someone for the first time.
I have been working on a 2nd verse, just trying to work it in to a dead stop
I was trying to convey the perfect moment with someone and how time stops dead for a few moments, such as when you feel you love for someone for the first time.
I have been working on a 2nd verse, just trying to work it in to a dead stop
28th Jun 2012 1:08am
14th Jul 2012 9:55pm
