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Ah now I see
Ah now I see --
you want my voice against your ear,
you want me whispering your name
as if it were the only word I know,
as if it were a flame beneath my skin.
And when you feel that fire has reached my lips
and is then fevering my breath,
you’d have me whisper it to you
again.
you want my voice against your ear,
you want me whispering your name
as if it were the only word I know,
as if it were a flame beneath my skin.
And when you feel that fire has reached my lips
and is then fevering my breath,
you’d have me whisper it to you
again.
Published 11th Feb 2024
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21st Feb 2024 4:28pm
Thanks for your comment. But is it really hubris to want to know whether my submission is poetically effective, let alone how and why it is so I note that you yourself wish to receive criticism of your submissions.
28th Feb 2024 5:50pm
"I do want critique, naturally but I won't make a song & dance about it. If you want something, you have to go after it."
Isn't that exactly what I did?
Isn't that exactly what I did?
