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I’ve laid the bull’s bones
and its thigh fat on
the altar stone
and set the pyre beneath them into flame
then prayed my sacrifice
would find some favor in
the eyes of Him,
the holy one
I call The Name..
But I was not so pious or
so brainless as to think
that breathing in the rising smoke,
however sweet the smell of it,
would take me up to Him
or cause me anything but agony
within my lungs
and make me Him disdain.
No, such a thing, I knew,
would root me to the earth
in coughing fits and tears
and bleary sight,
not place me in the skies.
and its thigh fat on
the altar stone
and set the pyre beneath them into flame
then prayed my sacrifice
would find some favor in
the eyes of Him,
the holy one
I call The Name..
But I was not so pious or
so brainless as to think
that breathing in the rising smoke,
however sweet the smell of it,
would take me up to Him
or cause me anything but agony
within my lungs
and make me Him disdain.
No, such a thing, I knew,
would root me to the earth
in coughing fits and tears
and bleary sight,
not place me in the skies.
Published 12th May 2023
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12th May 2023 8:40pm
Dear Baldwin,
How stupid is to think
that breathing in the rising smoke
will take you up to him
in body, not in thoughts and soul !
How stupid is to think
that breathing in the rising smoke
will take you up to him
in body, not in thoughts and soul !
"Dear Baldwin,
How stupid [it] is to think
that breathing in the rising smoke
will take you up to him
in body, not in thoughts and soul "
Breathing in smoke will take my thoughts to how deprived of air I am. and how I might die of smoke inhalation. And I have no idea how smoke has any effect on "soul" since "soul" is immaterial.
And isn't the implication of these lines:
It's easy for them to lift me.
At times, they might be strong
and take me far too high
to spheres which are so sweet.
that you are lifted bodily by the curves of smoke to upper realms? You speak of lifting "me", not your thoughts.
How stupid [it] is to think
that breathing in the rising smoke
will take you up to him
in body, not in thoughts and soul "
Breathing in smoke will take my thoughts to how deprived of air I am. and how I might die of smoke inhalation. And I have no idea how smoke has any effect on "soul" since "soul" is immaterial.
And isn't the implication of these lines:
It's easy for them to lift me.
At times, they might be strong
and take me far too high
to spheres which are so sweet.
that you are lifted bodily by the curves of smoke to upper realms? You speak of lifting "me", not your thoughts.
