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.38 ways to say i love you
Its blackness shone as a terribly familiar contrast & that gaping maw
matched the pit of your eyes perfectly
I always did love those storm cloud eyes
even when they didn't belong to you
the earth still spun as our children slept
flimsy doors & drywall illusions
tucked them in each night
better than I ever could
& the only gift I had left to give them
was survival.... because love
wasn't enough
I watched the ghosts flit in & out
of a .38 (caliber) hole above a rickety ceiling fan
each clack of the blades
becoming an incessant reminder
that no matter how many holes
the wind blows through
there isn't an easy way out
Published 24th Apr 2023
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24th Apr 2023 00:20am
24th Apr 2023 2:04am
24th Apr 2023 3:17am
Yes it is and I think they feel it the most.
Its been a long journey, but I'm glad to be on the healing side of it.
Thanks for the hug :)
Its been a long journey, but I'm glad to be on the healing side of it.
Thanks for the hug :)
24th Apr 2023 12:53pm
Dear K,
A difficult subject on which to comment. The poetic portrayal is outstanding in expressing the underlying fear, anxiety, love and overwhelming desire to be safe.
It is a comfort to read you’re on the other side of this now. May it continue to be so and all the blessings that come with that. Your strength is a testament of courage. Great write.
H🌷
A difficult subject on which to comment. The poetic portrayal is outstanding in expressing the underlying fear, anxiety, love and overwhelming desire to be safe.
It is a comfort to read you’re on the other side of this now. May it continue to be so and all the blessings that come with that. Your strength is a testament of courage. Great write.
H🌷
24th Apr 2023 8:36pm
A very difficult subject to comment, write, or even read about maybe, which is why I appreciate the comment that much more.
Thanks for always being that person, even on the tough ones, I appreciate you.
- Kas
Thanks for always being that person, even on the tough ones, I appreciate you.
- Kas
24th Apr 2023 1:53pm
(Hugs) to you. It’s never easy. Talking is healing. I’ve been in awe of your willingness to expose your vulnerability. Fantastic write on a very difficult subject.
25th Apr 2023 3:21am
Yes exactly, talking, writing, all of it part of the healing process.
Thanks so much for taking the time to comment and for sitting with me awhile
Thanks so much for taking the time to comment and for sitting with me awhile
13th May 2023 1:20am
Awesome. Literally a whole novel's worth shoved tightly into a poem. This isn't a brief read at all, no matter how short it is. It lingers.
Very good write, Kasai.
Very good write, Kasai.
13th May 2023 11:32pm
Thanks Styxian, appreciate the awesome comment. Glad you took the time to come by
19th May 2023 10:26pm
I've been there, seems alluring in the moment. It's a beautiful thing that you're living, experiencing all life's gifts.. peace and blessings to you
28th Sep 2023 9:53pm
24th Apr 2024 9:34am
A profound and heartwrenching poem! This is so beautifully written. Thank you for sharing it!
25th Nov 2024 9:25pm
30th Dec 2024 6:37am
The choices being run, fight or die - I never chose die. My writings are an attempt to understand and get some of the putrid stuff out of me. I'll deal but not heal. I got out of my mother's house of whores and horrors only to end up with a violent husband. As my writing. "It's All I Knew" shows - I can't handle a good relationship. It was too much to try and understand. I don't understand people or myself.
25th Feb 2025 2:24am
I have seen storm cloud eyes but did not have the words to describe them. Thanks for sharing.
