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DIRTY SEX LEADS ASTRAY.
DIRTY SEX LEADS ASTRAY.
How can a person love and cause
a serious harm to his own dear?
They go to bed and know their act
is urged by evil, their main foe.
What they commit will pass so fast,
but it immerses them in dirt
that blocks the rays of joy and light
which take them up to supreme heights.
This light can clear the way of saints
that leads to mirth so cool and wise
which gives them samples of a life
a person can meet in the skies.
When sex can lead a pair astray,
it destroys them and kills their cheer
as sin disturbs their stable lives
that ignite flames which are called hell.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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How can a person love and cause
a serious harm to his own dear?
They go to bed and know their act
is urged by evil, their main foe.
What they commit will pass so fast,
but it immerses them in dirt
that blocks the rays of joy and light
which take them up to supreme heights.
This light can clear the way of saints
that leads to mirth so cool and wise
which gives them samples of a life
a person can meet in the skies.
When sex can lead a pair astray,
it destroys them and kills their cheer
as sin disturbs their stable lives
that ignite flames which are called hell.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 13th Mar 2023
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Forgive me, but I thought
that Genesis proclaims
that the desire that wells up in a man
to take one’s love aside
within the middle of the day
or early morn
or late at night
and with his body worship her
and make her cry “oh God!”
(a thing it seems
you’ve never had the skill
to make a woman do
or you would not despise sex so)
comes not from a malicious foe
but was (and is) a blessing
and a gift from God
to “man”
and something that
he wanted man to know
and joy himself within with frequency
that was designed to help to lead the way
to bonds of lasting love and bliss
not in the skies,
but here on his good earth.
Nor is it in that book disdained as sin
let alone the source of it
It’s your dogmatic prudishness
that makes you blind to this.
that Genesis proclaims
that the desire that wells up in a man
to take one’s love aside
within the middle of the day
or early morn
or late at night
and with his body worship her
and make her cry “oh God!”
(a thing it seems
you’ve never had the skill
to make a woman do
or you would not despise sex so)
comes not from a malicious foe
but was (and is) a blessing
and a gift from God
to “man”
and something that
he wanted man to know
and joy himself within with frequency
that was designed to help to lead the way
to bonds of lasting love and bliss
not in the skies,
but here on his good earth.
Nor is it in that book disdained as sin
let alone the source of it
It’s your dogmatic prudishness
that makes you blind to this.
Not only is the thesis of this piece execrable. The piece itself is, starting with its title, horribly written.
DIRTY SEX LEADS ASTRAY is poorly set out in that it needs to say who or what is led astray by “dirty sex” for it to make sense.
Moreover, it is unclear what is meant by “dirty sex” and takes no awareness that ”dirty sex” is not, as presumably supposed without warrant, is the same thing as “sinful sex” or “illicit sex”. It’s not. It’s only in the eye of prudes like you that “non vanilla” sex is something morally and objectively wrong. Did you mean adultery?
“How can a person love and cause
a serious harm to his own dear?”
Not only do you not go on to answer the question you raise, but it is unclear what you are asking since “his own dear” is an ambiguous phrase. -- the referent of “his dear: could be his mother” or anyone who is dear to him. If you meant his one's wife, you needed to say so. And what is the serious harm you speak of?
If you meant to say something along the lines of
How can a man who says he loves his wife
go on to violate his vow of faithfulness
and bed a woman not his own?
You've come nowhere close to saying it.
“They go to bed and know their act
is urged by evil, their main foe.”
It is simply nonsense, as well as untrue to say, that everyone who goes to bed with someone is urged to do so by evil. Many people do so in order to express affection with another and to build bonds between themselves.
“What they commit will pass so fast,”
So what? The pleasure derived from having a good meal passes quickly. But that does not mean that one should not eat.
“but it immerses them in dirt”
This is absurd.
“that blocks the rays of joy and light
which take them up to supreme heights”.
What is your evidence for this claim, even if “rays” of joy and light take anyone anywhere?
“This light can clear the way of saints
that leads to mirth so cool and wise”
There is no such thing as “wise” mirth. You’ve written this so you can get a rhyme. And it is the experience of many that sex produces “mirth” If you are claiming that it is only sex within marriage that leads to mirth, then you don’t know what you are talking about. And does “the way of saints” (whatever that is} need clearing?
“which gives them samples of a life
a person can meet in the skies.”
No one – except pilots and sky divers - meets a mirthful life, let alone samples of it, in the skies. Which, BTW only goes up to 10,000 km above the earth. Beyond that is Space. And anyone who is in Space without a space suit and oxygen does not meet any kind of life (as there is none there). They meet death. Moreover, the Bible notes that the true and ultimate abode of human beings is the earth.
“When sex can lead a pair astray,”
When sex **can** (i.e., is able to) or when sex **does** lead a pair astray?
“it destroys them and kills their cheer.”
Assuming that yu are speaking of culturally illicit sex and that such sex is death-dealing, it only does this if it **does** lead a pair (of what?) astray.
And your evidence for your claim that (presumably illicit) sex always destroys people and kills their “cheer” (like “mirth”, is one of your overused words this claim is what? So far as I know, there are very few autopsy reports that note that the cause of someone’s demise was sex.
Moreover, if the pair you are speaking of is a man and his wife, it is difficult to think that sex will lead them astray. They are supposed to have sex, yes. And what would it lead them astray from?
“as sin disturbs their stable lives
that ignite flames which are called hell”
Your syntax here makes you say that “stable lives” ignite flames that are called hell. If you mean to say that sin brings hell flames to sinners’ lives, then you needed to have used “ignites” rather than “ignite”.
DIRTY SEX LEADS ASTRAY is poorly set out in that it needs to say who or what is led astray by “dirty sex” for it to make sense.
Moreover, it is unclear what is meant by “dirty sex” and takes no awareness that ”dirty sex” is not, as presumably supposed without warrant, is the same thing as “sinful sex” or “illicit sex”. It’s not. It’s only in the eye of prudes like you that “non vanilla” sex is something morally and objectively wrong. Did you mean adultery?
“How can a person love and cause
a serious harm to his own dear?”
Not only do you not go on to answer the question you raise, but it is unclear what you are asking since “his own dear” is an ambiguous phrase. -- the referent of “his dear: could be his mother” or anyone who is dear to him. If you meant his one's wife, you needed to say so. And what is the serious harm you speak of?
If you meant to say something along the lines of
How can a man who says he loves his wife
go on to violate his vow of faithfulness
and bed a woman not his own?
You've come nowhere close to saying it.
“They go to bed and know their act
is urged by evil, their main foe.”
It is simply nonsense, as well as untrue to say, that everyone who goes to bed with someone is urged to do so by evil. Many people do so in order to express affection with another and to build bonds between themselves.
“What they commit will pass so fast,”
So what? The pleasure derived from having a good meal passes quickly. But that does not mean that one should not eat.
“but it immerses them in dirt”
This is absurd.
“that blocks the rays of joy and light
which take them up to supreme heights”.
What is your evidence for this claim, even if “rays” of joy and light take anyone anywhere?
“This light can clear the way of saints
that leads to mirth so cool and wise”
There is no such thing as “wise” mirth. You’ve written this so you can get a rhyme. And it is the experience of many that sex produces “mirth” If you are claiming that it is only sex within marriage that leads to mirth, then you don’t know what you are talking about. And does “the way of saints” (whatever that is} need clearing?
“which gives them samples of a life
a person can meet in the skies.”
No one – except pilots and sky divers - meets a mirthful life, let alone samples of it, in the skies. Which, BTW only goes up to 10,000 km above the earth. Beyond that is Space. And anyone who is in Space without a space suit and oxygen does not meet any kind of life (as there is none there). They meet death. Moreover, the Bible notes that the true and ultimate abode of human beings is the earth.
“When sex can lead a pair astray,”
When sex **can** (i.e., is able to) or when sex **does** lead a pair astray?
“it destroys them and kills their cheer.”
Assuming that yu are speaking of culturally illicit sex and that such sex is death-dealing, it only does this if it **does** lead a pair (of what?) astray.
And your evidence for your claim that (presumably illicit) sex always destroys people and kills their “cheer” (like “mirth”, is one of your overused words this claim is what? So far as I know, there are very few autopsy reports that note that the cause of someone’s demise was sex.
Moreover, if the pair you are speaking of is a man and his wife, it is difficult to think that sex will lead them astray. They are supposed to have sex, yes. And what would it lead them astray from?
“as sin disturbs their stable lives
that ignite flames which are called hell”
Your syntax here makes you say that “stable lives” ignite flames that are called hell. If you mean to say that sin brings hell flames to sinners’ lives, then you needed to have used “ignites” rather than “ignite”.
16th Mar 2023 3:40pm
If we listen to just what the Bible
has to say,
most notably in Jacob’s book
regarding what it really is
that’s at the root of mankind’s going astray
from God
and all that’s good
it isn’t sex of any kind
or desire for it.
It’s when the love of money’s
on a person’s mind
and fills his soul.
The only ones who think it’s
otherwise
are joyless puritans
and withered sour sexist souls
who, because they fear they are
but creatures weak and know
they have
no self-control if a "woman touched",
despise themselves
and, through projection, wrongly hold
that God’s good gift
of pleasures of the flesh,
are for mankind
the source evil and of sin
has to say,
most notably in Jacob’s book
regarding what it really is
that’s at the root of mankind’s going astray
from God
and all that’s good
it isn’t sex of any kind
or desire for it.
It’s when the love of money’s
on a person’s mind
and fills his soul.
The only ones who think it’s
otherwise
are joyless puritans
and withered sour sexist souls
who, because they fear they are
but creatures weak and know
they have
no self-control if a "woman touched",
despise themselves
and, through projection, wrongly hold
that God’s good gift
of pleasures of the flesh,
are for mankind
the source evil and of sin
