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Burned to death.
Your bodys on fire,
Your face will melt.
Skinning you alive,
Like nothing you've ever felt.
Flesh turned black,
Take one last breath.
Screaming out blood,
You're burned to death.
Your face will melt.
Skinning you alive,
Like nothing you've ever felt.
Flesh turned black,
Take one last breath.
Screaming out blood,
You're burned to death.
Published 8th Apr 2012
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8th Apr 2012 2:48pm
Maybe you should've gone a little longer with this... I'd say 3 minimum. It would probably help alot as it seems this was just too short for me to get into.
9th Apr 2012 9:50am
this was pretty short and the end stanza didn't carry enough of a punch but still i guess it was okay
3rd Dec 2012 00:51am
I like this one! I think the brevity is appropriate; it makes it seem like someone's almost singing mockingly to the person who's burning, which makes it even darker.
10th Jun 2015 5:13pm
Wow. Some dark subject matter never hurt anyone! This is a beautiful, albeit short, piece. The length is a quaint juxtaposition against the eternity a person who is being burned alive must feel.
Keep it flowing!
Here's to you!
Keep it flowing!
Here's to you!
