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My Wolf
In the night I like to play,
For hopes that they will run this way,
Howling while I hold on tight,
To free the wolf that's trapped this night,
In this body cursed and bound,
To suffer in this human gown,
Alone I cry and try to hide,
This wolf that's dwelling deep inside,
With the pack I long to run,
To chase and catch the evening sun,
To howl, to leap, to sleep in woods,
This dream of mine it feels so good.
For hopes that they will run this way,
Howling while I hold on tight,
To free the wolf that's trapped this night,
In this body cursed and bound,
To suffer in this human gown,
Alone I cry and try to hide,
This wolf that's dwelling deep inside,
With the pack I long to run,
To chase and catch the evening sun,
To howl, to leap, to sleep in woods,
This dream of mine it feels so good.
Published 7th Oct 2022
Author's Note
The wolf is my favorite kind of animal.
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7th Oct 2022 3:04pm
Excellent poem!
Your tetrameters read extremely well.
The rhyme at the end of line six would be more simpatico if altered to the past tense form of the word, so "gowned" rather than "gown", and there is a similar thing going on at the ends of the final two lines. An option would be to leave "gown" as it is and try to alter "bound" to match with "gown". I suspect they can fixed with some modest line tinkering. Of course, they can stand as they are since many authors do a "near rhyme" thing. All up to you, of course.
Very much a fun read either way!
Your tetrameters read extremely well.
The rhyme at the end of line six would be more simpatico if altered to the past tense form of the word, so "gowned" rather than "gown", and there is a similar thing going on at the ends of the final two lines. An option would be to leave "gown" as it is and try to alter "bound" to match with "gown". I suspect they can fixed with some modest line tinkering. Of course, they can stand as they are since many authors do a "near rhyme" thing. All up to you, of course.
Very much a fun read either way!
8th Oct 2022 1:30am
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8th Oct 2022 3:49pm
“Beware of a wolf in sheep’s clothing.” ― Aesop
your dreams let your inner wolf run wild and free.
your dreams let your inner wolf run wild and free.
9th Oct 2022 1:32pm
Nicely done... wolf is my spiritual totem... great job... welcome to DUP...
15th Oct 2022 3:24pm
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