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did i dream you dreamed about me?
Built an altar from drowned
Deck chairs and violin strings,
If the Band can play on through it all
Why can’t your body be pressed against mine?
Love’s last sails held rigor mortis to
The stern words we exchanged on
Bulbous bow of Mermaid Avenue –
We bowdlerised their real meaning.
We should have photo-shopped
Our lonely boats onto Hushaby Mountain
Left tiny presidents of the past
As landladies for our unborn children.
T_y/o_pography of two minds stress the serif font
Where private language is christened,
My hands remain empty
Touching those I love.
Deck chairs and violin strings,
If the Band can play on through it all
Why can’t your body be pressed against mine?
Love’s last sails held rigor mortis to
The stern words we exchanged on
Bulbous bow of Mermaid Avenue –
We bowdlerised their real meaning.
We should have photo-shopped
Our lonely boats onto Hushaby Mountain
Left tiny presidents of the past
As landladies for our unborn children.
T_y/o_pography of two minds stress the serif font
Where private language is christened,
My hands remain empty
Touching those I love.
Published 21st Aug 2022
Author's Note
ERULGCT 167. Title unashamedly stolen from Song to the Siren, Tim Buckley.
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21st Aug 2022 3:47pm
The final contradiction is a perfect close, empty hands touching those whom the narrator loves... I really like that, and the poem as a whole is wonderful, as in filled with wonders. My rather traditional mind balks at “T_y/o_pography”, which reads too much like computer code to me, but it makes poetic sense and I like it the more that I see it. I think that my objection to such presentation is that it tends to look more like a juvenile mistake than an intentional artistic choice, but with this poem it’s clearly intentional.
21st Aug 2022 5:40pm
Mucho thanks for the comments. Appreciated. You are perfectly correct. That line is ugly & sterile.
