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Wonderland
Curious, creeping, tiny blond little Alice.
Went down the rabbit hole.
Curious, creeping, fragile little blond Alice.
Followed Mr. White Rabbit.
Curious, creeping, silly little blond Alice.
Found a bed of flowers upon the mushroom stool.
Curious, creeping, stupid little Alice.
Came upon a “Tweedly Dee and a Tweedly Dah”.
Curious, creeping, funny little Alice.
Looking around, found a Cheshire.
Curious, creeping distracted little Alice.
Walked through the door and came upon a heart shaped kingdom.
Curious, creeping, careful little Alice.
They slandered and squawked at you.
Curious, creeping, flustered little Alice.
They came at you with oh dear little Alice with swords and croquettes.
Curious, creeping, fragile little Alice.
Then the queen yelled, “OFF WITH HER HEAD!”
Curious, creeping, terrified little Alice.
You ran and ran, all out of breath until you came upon that door again.
Curious, creeping, exhausted little Alice.
Through that door you found yourself going.
Curious, creeping frightened little Alice.
Until you found yourself falling,
Falling,
Falling,
Falling.
Curious, creeping, falling little Alice.
Opened your hazy, bloodshot eyes and found yourself dreaming.
Curious, creeping, tiny, blond fragile, silly, stupid, funny, distracted, careful, flustered, fragile, terrified, exhausted, frightened, falling, slender little Alice.
This was my very first poem that I ever wrote.
Went down the rabbit hole.
Curious, creeping, fragile little blond Alice.
Followed Mr. White Rabbit.
Curious, creeping, silly little blond Alice.
Found a bed of flowers upon the mushroom stool.
Curious, creeping, stupid little Alice.
Came upon a “Tweedly Dee and a Tweedly Dah”.
Curious, creeping, funny little Alice.
Looking around, found a Cheshire.
Curious, creeping distracted little Alice.
Walked through the door and came upon a heart shaped kingdom.
Curious, creeping, careful little Alice.
They slandered and squawked at you.
Curious, creeping, flustered little Alice.
They came at you with oh dear little Alice with swords and croquettes.
Curious, creeping, fragile little Alice.
Then the queen yelled, “OFF WITH HER HEAD!”
Curious, creeping, terrified little Alice.
You ran and ran, all out of breath until you came upon that door again.
Curious, creeping, exhausted little Alice.
Through that door you found yourself going.
Curious, creeping frightened little Alice.
Until you found yourself falling,
Falling,
Falling,
Falling.
Curious, creeping, falling little Alice.
Opened your hazy, bloodshot eyes and found yourself dreaming.
Curious, creeping, tiny, blond fragile, silly, stupid, funny, distracted, careful, flustered, fragile, terrified, exhausted, frightened, falling, slender little Alice.
This was my very first poem that I ever wrote.
Published 9th Jan 2012
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9th Jan 2012 3:33pm
Great use of syntax. I like the lines that are little contained streams of conciousness
10th Jan 2012 1:22am
I don't understand your "Subject" O.o
Also what do you mean by "streams of conciousness"?
And thank you<3
Also what do you mean by "streams of conciousness"?
And thank you<3
9th Jan 2012 5:26pm
Refreshing read.. Love alice in wonderland!! For this to be your first poem your perspective is one well thought out. Its pretty good:)
I think this would be best under Observational cate' not Misc.
I think this would be best under Observational cate' not Misc.
10th Jan 2012 1:29am
I'm glad to hear that it was refreshing for you:3
lol-if you hadn't guess,me too!
Thank you,sincerly. I don't know it just came to me one day in English class and then I found out about the movie a month later lol
Well I'll change that,thank you,again<3
lol-if you hadn't guess,me too!
Thank you,sincerly. I don't know it just came to me one day in English class and then I found out about the movie a month later lol
Well I'll change that,thank you,again<3
10th Jan 2012 5:34am
I loved how her feeling constantly changed as the poem went. Her path of troubles. For a first write this is still great. My first write ended me up in the principals office.
10th Jan 2012 4:24pm
Thank you very much sir. I had this line going through my head all day,so I finally wrote it down and this is what I came up with.At first I was going to keep the line the same through out,but then I realized that would have been way to repetative,so then I changed it and fell in love with poetry ever since. Whoa,whoa,whoa,why did it end up with you in the princilpals office?XD
11th Jan 2012 5:35pm
Let's just say for being in high school my writing was not so called " age appropriate ". Plus I read it in front of the class. I really pushed the "freedom of speach" pretty far. Lol
12th Jan 2012 4:04pm
