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over it-sorry its really bad i wrote this thro tears-
..Am i really over it? Did i really move on or did i play it off as if i did? I know his after another and i shoulnt care, but i cant help feel a small pain in my heart. Is this what its come to be me being th pathetic background girl to stupid and naivie(correct that) to move on from something dead. Am i always going to be the desprete loser that goes after things she cant have? Its sad really steping back and looking at my life from the outside. It hurts to watch myself aimlessly throw myself at a boy(not men they are far from men) when they show me the slightest bit of attention or tripping over myself to be the center (hard as it is to admitt ). You and i dont have to worry about that anymore for i will shut down start over become the girl i need to be improve on my flaws......
Published 6th Dec 2011
| Edited 7th Dec 2011
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6th Dec 2011 8:40pm
Ok your kinda all over the place. Describe what your going through than how you fell.
I killed today
I felt nothing bitterly numb
Laying there like a rag doll
All curled up into a ball.
Instead of writing everything like a story which you can. It's called free verse. Just break it up into stanzas
When you break it up alittle; it makes the reader hunt for the next line. Read others see how they do it, and do your own thing. It is YOUR feelings right? Right. A diamond in the ruff but doing well. Don't hold back let it flow.
I killed today
I felt nothing bitterly numb
Laying there like a rag doll
All curled up into a ball.
Instead of writing everything like a story which you can. It's called free verse. Just break it up into stanzas
When you break it up alittle; it makes the reader hunt for the next line. Read others see how they do it, and do your own thing. It is YOUR feelings right? Right. A diamond in the ruff but doing well. Don't hold back let it flow.
7th Dec 2011 1:46am
