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Dolor (Sorrow)
May
Your
Memories
Assault
Remembrances
In
Another
Mind,
Your
Devotion
Emulated
And
Revered.
Imagine
Singing
To
Inane
Little
Lullabies
Leaving
Orifices
Very
Empty
Your
Ocean
Untouched.
Your
Memories
Assault
Remembrances
In
Another
Mind,
Your
Devotion
Emulated
And
Revered.
Imagine
Singing
To
Inane
Little
Lullabies
Leaving
Orifices
Very
Empty
Your
Ocean
Untouched.
Published 27th Nov 2011
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27th Nov 2011 2:36am
I like the short, sweet feel to this. For some reason I dislike the word choice of "inane;" it has the wrong connotation in my mind, makes it seem like you're trying to say the lullabies were absurd or unintelligent, which doesn't go along with the feel of the rest. Overall though not a bad piece.
