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IT IS MY LIFE SO FUCK OFF
To much comotion
So little devotion
Barly any captivation
Which results in no motivation
'They are our future!' he proclaims
Hey,shouldn't I get a say on how I'm sustained!
What if I don't wanna be a doctor
Or some unhappy hardworking motherfucker
Its my choice so let it go
Instead of shoving some stressing caree down my throat
'Blah blah blah' is all I hear
While your giveing me another stay in school speal
I've heard it enough times to know what I want
So get over yourself, I'm sick of your taunts
Take it easy, fuck, stop stressing!
Just live your own life and stop this pressing
So little devotion
Barly any captivation
Which results in no motivation
'They are our future!' he proclaims
Hey,shouldn't I get a say on how I'm sustained!
What if I don't wanna be a doctor
Or some unhappy hardworking motherfucker
Its my choice so let it go
Instead of shoving some stressing caree down my throat
'Blah blah blah' is all I hear
While your giveing me another stay in school speal
I've heard it enough times to know what I want
So get over yourself, I'm sick of your taunts
Take it easy, fuck, stop stressing!
Just live your own life and stop this pressing
Published 22nd Nov 2011
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22nd Nov 2011 8:13pm
This should be printed and given to teachers everywhere! True they all have good intentions but some times they need to lay the freak off.
23rd Nov 2011 7:12pm
this poem is great and you have talent but you just need a spell check unless you meant to spell like that :) a poet with hidden talent
23rd Nov 2011 7:31pm
there's a typo: 'giveing'
this poem needs fullstops! your thoughts are pilled up one next to another which makes it a bit confusing to read.
try reading it aloud and you'll see for yourself!
this poem needs fullstops! your thoughts are pilled up one next to another which makes it a bit confusing to read.
try reading it aloud and you'll see for yourself!
24th Nov 2011 3:18am
ok thanks for the feedback peoples ;) my spelling is shitty, I do need aspell check :P n yeah I get what you mean by the full stops :) thanks!
2nd Dec 2011 5:02am
Having spent 5 years at the junior high level with a population that most had written off, I hear ya loud and clear. We tend to lose sight of what sparks the imagination and a natural sense of wonder in order to homogenize education, as if one size works for everyone.
Keep on writing!
Keep on writing!
26th Jun 2014 6:19am
I agree with ever word!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
