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Another Late Night Rendevouz PART 1
It was around three a.m.
He quietly unlocked the door
Finding his way to my bedroom in the darkness
he came to me.
The feeling of his lips on my neck awakens me from a deep sleep
His fingers slide under the covers then slip into my panties, entering me slowly.
Bracing myself, I tightly squeeze his wrist and bit my bottom lip as I open my eyes.
He removes his fingers then takes me by the hand
He leads me out of the bedroom, down the dark hallway to the dining room
He lights a candle, pulls out a chair, and takes a seat
There I stand awaiting his next move
He pulls me close and tells me to undress for him slowly
Each breath I take is more intense than the last
Finally I reach the bottom of the negligee
Take your time he commands
Exposing my breast as the sleeves fall off my shoulders
Holding the material around my waist I continue to stare into his eyes
Yes he says keep going, let it go
I exhale and release the gown down onto the floor
Good girl he says
Now turn around, bend over, and remove your panties he commands
I arch my back
My fingertips caress the back of my thighs
My ass tilted in the air, I began to slide my panties off the curves of my cheeks
My feet move further apart as the material moves down my thighs
falling to my ankles
Don’t move he says
stay just like that
He moves in closer until his face buries between my legs
He licks my lips with the tip of his tongue
My hands wrapped around my ankles
My body shakes
His tongue reaches my clit
I close my eyes and concentrate to stay in position
Barely able to continue standing my knees tremble
He stops and leans back into his chair
He turns me around
He is naked and hard
He pushes me down onto my knees
Open your mouth he commands
Good girl
He rubs his hardness all over my lips
then pushes the tip to the back of my throat
I suck him aggressively
No no not like that he insists
Slowly, romantically he continues
make love to my dick using your tongue and lips
I follow his request
He closes his eyes and tilts his head back
He swells, thick and long
My mouth wet and warm
he extends ready to release
but he begs me to stop
I don’t want it this way he moans ……….not yet….
He quietly unlocked the door
Finding his way to my bedroom in the darkness
he came to me.
The feeling of his lips on my neck awakens me from a deep sleep
His fingers slide under the covers then slip into my panties, entering me slowly.
Bracing myself, I tightly squeeze his wrist and bit my bottom lip as I open my eyes.
He removes his fingers then takes me by the hand
He leads me out of the bedroom, down the dark hallway to the dining room
He lights a candle, pulls out a chair, and takes a seat
There I stand awaiting his next move
He pulls me close and tells me to undress for him slowly
Each breath I take is more intense than the last
Finally I reach the bottom of the negligee
Take your time he commands
Exposing my breast as the sleeves fall off my shoulders
Holding the material around my waist I continue to stare into his eyes
Yes he says keep going, let it go
I exhale and release the gown down onto the floor
Good girl he says
Now turn around, bend over, and remove your panties he commands
I arch my back
My fingertips caress the back of my thighs
My ass tilted in the air, I began to slide my panties off the curves of my cheeks
My feet move further apart as the material moves down my thighs
falling to my ankles
Don’t move he says
stay just like that
He moves in closer until his face buries between my legs
He licks my lips with the tip of his tongue
My hands wrapped around my ankles
My body shakes
His tongue reaches my clit
I close my eyes and concentrate to stay in position
Barely able to continue standing my knees tremble
He stops and leans back into his chair
He turns me around
He is naked and hard
He pushes me down onto my knees
Open your mouth he commands
Good girl
He rubs his hardness all over my lips
then pushes the tip to the back of my throat
I suck him aggressively
No no not like that he insists
Slowly, romantically he continues
make love to my dick using your tongue and lips
I follow his request
He closes his eyes and tilts his head back
He swells, thick and long
My mouth wet and warm
he extends ready to release
but he begs me to stop
I don’t want it this way he moans ……….not yet….
Published 5th Nov 2011
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Anonymous
5th Nov 2011 3:33pm
wow oh wow Emmanuelle Monet as always a pleasure reading your work.
5th Nov 2011 5:21pm
Anonymous
5th Nov 2011 11:20pm
ty and i you!
Anonymous
7th Nov 2011 5:19pm
Emmanuelle,
I've really missed your writing and now you grace us with this! Very HOT!!! The wait was worth it!
tornado
I've really missed your writing and now you grace us with this! Very HOT!!! The wait was worth it!
tornado
Anonymous
7th Nov 2011 6:10pm
I like the way this takes its time, sets a mood and brings the reader very much into the 'action'. Ultimately the test of good erotica has got to be 'did it make you horny?' - it did.
It has a few flaws, particularly the mixing of tenses at the beginning ( I reckon it should definitely ALL be PRESENT tense, as that adds to its sense of immediacy and tension.) Also you could ease the flow of the dialogue a lot by using just punctuation/parentheses instead of 'he said' and 'he commanded' which pulls the poem very much towards the proasaic. I'll do a copy and paste by way of suggestion, (no presumption intended,it's just the easiest and quickest way )
Really liked it. R.
It's around three a.m.
He quietly unlocks the door.
Finding his way to my bedroom in the darkness
he comes to me.
The feeling of his lips on my neck awakens me from a deep sleep
His fingers slide under the covers then slip into my panties, entering me slowly.
Bracing myself, I tightly squeeze his wrist and bite my bottom lip as I open my eyes.
He removes his fingers then takes me by the hand, pulling me gently from my slumber and from the bed.
He leads me out of the bedroom, down the dark hallway to the dining room.
He lights a candle, pulls out a chair, and takes a seat.
I stand there, waiting.
He pulls me close and tells me to undress for him, slowly.
Each breath I take is more intense than the last.
I fumble at my negligee.
Finally I reach the bottom of the hem.
'Take your time' he commands.
My breasts are exposed as the sleeves fall off my shoulders.
Holding the fabric around my waist I continue to stare into his eyes.
'Yes. Keep going, let it go.'
I exhale, releasing my gown to the floor.
'Good girl.
Now turn around. Bend over. Remove your panties.'
I arch my back
My fingertips caress the back of my thighs
My ass tilts in the air, I begin to slide my panties off the curves of my cheeks
My feet move further apart as the material moves down my thighs
falling to my ankles.
'Don’t move' he says
'stay just like that'
He moves in closer, buries his face between my thighs.
He licks my lips with the tip of his tongue/
My hands wrap around my ankles.
My body shakes
His tongue reaches my clit ...
I close my eyes and concentrate, trying to hold the position
Barely able to continue standing
my knees tremble.
He stops and goes back to his chair.
He turns me around.
He is naked and
hard.
He pushes me down to my knees.
'Open your mouth.
Good girl.'
He rubs his hardness all over my lips
then pushes the tip to the back of my throat.
I suck him savagely.
No! No not like that.
Slowly.
Romantically.
Make love to my dick using your tongue and lips.'
I bow to his wishes.
He closes his eyes and tilts his head back.
He swells, thick and long.
My mouth is wet and warm.
He extends ready to release
but he begs me to stop
I don’t want it this way he moans ……….not yet….
It has a few flaws, particularly the mixing of tenses at the beginning ( I reckon it should definitely ALL be PRESENT tense, as that adds to its sense of immediacy and tension.) Also you could ease the flow of the dialogue a lot by using just punctuation/parentheses instead of 'he said' and 'he commanded' which pulls the poem very much towards the proasaic. I'll do a copy and paste by way of suggestion, (no presumption intended,it's just the easiest and quickest way )
Really liked it. R.
It's around three a.m.
He quietly unlocks the door.
Finding his way to my bedroom in the darkness
he comes to me.
The feeling of his lips on my neck awakens me from a deep sleep
His fingers slide under the covers then slip into my panties, entering me slowly.
Bracing myself, I tightly squeeze his wrist and bite my bottom lip as I open my eyes.
He removes his fingers then takes me by the hand, pulling me gently from my slumber and from the bed.
He leads me out of the bedroom, down the dark hallway to the dining room.
He lights a candle, pulls out a chair, and takes a seat.
I stand there, waiting.
He pulls me close and tells me to undress for him, slowly.
Each breath I take is more intense than the last.
I fumble at my negligee.
Finally I reach the bottom of the hem.
'Take your time' he commands.
My breasts are exposed as the sleeves fall off my shoulders.
Holding the fabric around my waist I continue to stare into his eyes.
'Yes. Keep going, let it go.'
I exhale, releasing my gown to the floor.
'Good girl.
Now turn around. Bend over. Remove your panties.'
I arch my back
My fingertips caress the back of my thighs
My ass tilts in the air, I begin to slide my panties off the curves of my cheeks
My feet move further apart as the material moves down my thighs
falling to my ankles.
'Don’t move' he says
'stay just like that'
He moves in closer, buries his face between my thighs.
He licks my lips with the tip of his tongue/
My hands wrap around my ankles.
My body shakes
His tongue reaches my clit ...
I close my eyes and concentrate, trying to hold the position
Barely able to continue standing
my knees tremble.
He stops and goes back to his chair.
He turns me around.
He is naked and
hard.
He pushes me down to my knees.
'Open your mouth.
Good girl.'
He rubs his hardness all over my lips
then pushes the tip to the back of my throat.
I suck him savagely.
No! No not like that.
Slowly.
Romantically.
Make love to my dick using your tongue and lips.'
I bow to his wishes.
He closes his eyes and tilts his head back.
He swells, thick and long.
My mouth is wet and warm.
He extends ready to release
but he begs me to stop
I don’t want it this way he moans ……….not yet….
8th Nov 2011 3:50am
9th Nov 2011 12:16pm
.........like a beautiful, breath-taking orgasm. This allows the reader to very vividly see love-making; sensual, sweet, erotic, nasty, unbridled. All these thing wrapped in this verse. You have that touch and I too am glad that you're back.
