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Ballpoint Pen
The obsidian liquid runs through
The ballpoint pen
It moves with such ease
Caressing the paper
It curls and twists
On the vacant pages
Generating meaning
Ink bleeding into pores
It stains and scars
Milky white sheets
Leaving an impression
A signature
The pens desires
To express
The noir running through its vein
That drips through the ball
At the tip of the ballpoint pen
The ballpoint pen
It moves with such ease
Caressing the paper
It curls and twists
On the vacant pages
Generating meaning
Ink bleeding into pores
It stains and scars
Milky white sheets
Leaving an impression
A signature
The pens desires
To express
The noir running through its vein
That drips through the ball
At the tip of the ballpoint pen
Published 26th Jul 2018
| Edited 1st Aug 2018
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26th Jul 2018 11:49pm
31st Jul 2018 9:47pm
Nice piece of work you have there... love your premise... and your use of words... well done. Ely
PS. second stanza, line two... I wonder if you would consider using *vacant* rather than (void) there. I think it would flow better. Just my opinion, use it or not... the choice is strictly up to you. E
PS. second stanza, line two... I wonder if you would consider using *vacant* rather than (void) there. I think it would flow better. Just my opinion, use it or not... the choice is strictly up to you. E
1st Aug 2018 6:41am
Thank you! I agree that vacant would be better, I modified it. I appreciate your advice.
