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Happiness
I thought I'll die
When, one day, I felt my heart
Empty, without you.
Looking for you in the streets
In dreams, screaming all around
Your name, 'love'.
Kneeling before statues, before peoples
My heart in my hands.
But one day I felt the arms of someone
Surrounding me.
Now I feel my heart full again
Of you.
When, one day, I felt my heart
Empty, without you.
Looking for you in the streets
In dreams, screaming all around
Your name, 'love'.
Kneeling before statues, before peoples
My heart in my hands.
But one day I felt the arms of someone
Surrounding me.
Now I feel my heart full again
Of you.
Published 25th Sep 2011
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25th Sep 2011 4:03pm
You must be in my soul, as this mirrors my emotions, but I couldn't express this better. Thank you for sharing 'babe'. xxxxx
26th Sep 2011 5:12am
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5th Oct 2011 8:10pm
10th Oct 2011 2:15pm
A pretty piece, I thought about perhaps expansion but then I think this could be shortened or lengthened. The length does feel a little off for the emotion. Sometimes this emotion has been too many times through the laundry but I did like this piece so good job to that.
11th Oct 2011 10:09pm
Thank you for your comment indeed it can be longer and normaly it had to be but somethimes the images are difficult to get out from the head ::)). But also somethimes is good to let the reader decide and imagine his own story. This one has two subtile meanings personal and general
