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Fallen Building
Jealous mind feeding ill souls-
bringing undesired psychotic cerebration
It soon becomes impossible to calibrate,
its functions n' love addictions
Formation of havoc;
in love, relations n' connections...
Leading to a eventual downfall
Massive possession
or a simple "too much"
succeeding to a eternal farewell
Oxidation on our metallic heart,
rusts the golden times of past-
reddening the name of "Love"
Will you survive these chemicals,
leisurely tearing pieces of your soul?
Sometimes,
when one's attention
is driven to emulous benevolence-
one's emotions,
one's hopes,
Collapses like the exploited twin-tower
bringing undesired psychotic cerebration
It soon becomes impossible to calibrate,
its functions n' love addictions
Formation of havoc;
in love, relations n' connections...
Leading to a eventual downfall
Massive possession
or a simple "too much"
succeeding to a eternal farewell
Oxidation on our metallic heart,
rusts the golden times of past-
reddening the name of "Love"
Will you survive these chemicals,
leisurely tearing pieces of your soul?
Sometimes,
when one's attention
is driven to emulous benevolence-
one's emotions,
one's hopes,
Collapses like the exploited twin-tower
Published 17th Nov 2017
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17th Nov 2017 3:53am
I wasn't sure if this falls more on love or dark....
anyone have any thoughts on it?
anyone have any thoughts on it?
17th Nov 2017 6:23am
A deep, dark piece, that is powerful n unstable in its reign...
N Yea, DARK category for sure :)
N Yea, DARK category for sure :)
17th Nov 2017 8:18pm
Your supports, are always greatly appreciated Dear Poetikmind....
It was an experiment of mine to try a more organized form of my poem...
Honestly, this feels a bit unusual, but it was quuite fun putting all these phrases together..
Thank you:)
Love,
-H-
It was an experiment of mine to try a more organized form of my poem...
Honestly, this feels a bit unusual, but it was quuite fun putting all these phrases together..
Thank you:)
Love,
-H-
17th Nov 2017 12:38pm
Well done Little One. Fourth stanza is great as is the one line ending. Bravo my poetess
17th Nov 2017 8:24pm
Thank you...
Unnie!
(lol it may sound a bit cheesy but it means what a younger female calls her older sister)
Your feedbacks always brings such joy...
greatly appreciated,
Love,
-H-
Unnie!
(lol it may sound a bit cheesy but it means what a younger female calls her older sister)
Your feedbacks always brings such joy...
greatly appreciated,
Love,
-H-
17th Nov 2017 8:29pm
17th Nov 2017 8:32pm
Alright!
lol then I shall call you Unnie(it's korean..!)from this day forth :)
lol then I shall call you Unnie(it's korean..!)from this day forth :)
